Transcript Exercise 20

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(Worse) Our algorithm is more accurate with respect to
computational time.
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(Better) Our algorithm is more accurate than
conventional ones with respect to computational time.
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(Worse) The chemistry department cooperates with
local industry more than their department.
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(Better) The chemistry department cooperates with
local industry more than their department does.
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(Worse) The novel material is as strong, if not stronger
than, available ones.
(Better) The novel material is as strong as, if not
stronger than, available ones.
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(Worse) The research department’s productivity is
higher than the administrative division.
(Better) The research department’s productivity is
higher than that of the administrative division.
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(Worse) The two step-procedure assumes that the
sample standard deviation is proportional the sample
mean.
(Better) The two step-procedure assumes that the
sample standard deviation is proportional to the sample
mean.
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(Worse) The novel material described herein has a
higher withstanding temperature.
(Better) The novel material described herein has a
higher withstanding temperature than other materials.
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(Worse) The university stress discipline more than the
institute.
(Better) The university stress discipline more than the
institute does.
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(Worse) The peak is as high, if not higher than, other
ones.
(Better) The peak is as high as, if not higher than, other
ones.
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(Worse) The form of the fitting function should be
defined in advance adopt the regression method
effectively.
(Better) The form of the fitting function should be
defined in advance to effectively adopt the regression
method.
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(Worse) The trade school’s dropout rate is lower than
the university.
(Better) The trade school’s dropout rate is lower than
that of the university.
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(Worse) Temperature more significantly affects the
product’s shape.
(Better) Temperature significantly affects the product’s
shape more than other factors.
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(Worse) Our laboratory manager emphasizes
punctuality more that our division director.
(Better) Our laboratory manager emphasizes
punctuality more that our division director does.