Transcript BRUSH_STROKES_4 - Denton Independent School District

BRUSH
STROKES
From Image
Grammar by
Harry R.
Noden
Compiled by:
Rebecca
Meuse Glass
RESEARCH
“Students often see revision, not as an
opportunity to develop and improve a piece of
writing, but as an indication that they have failed
to do it right the first time.”
- Donald M. Murray
“Even high school students admit to little or no
experience in revision. At best, they may recopy
a paper.”
-Robert L. Hillerich
“Quick revising is a revision method for when the
results don’t matter too much. It may be used for
a clean draft for yourself, a possible draft for
discussion, or a letter to a friend.”
- Peter Elbow
“Thorough Revising involves time, allowing the
writer to visit and revisit the work, to be allowed
to view the writing with fresh perspectives.”
- Peter Elbow
“The writer is an artist, painting images of life
with specific and identifiable brush strokes.”
-Harry Noden
“He began to see grammar as the process of
creating art, it seemed unnatural to him not to
view grammar as a continuous spectrum in a
whole work.”
-Harry Noden
“Pictures are not made of flowers, guitars, people,
surf or turf, but with irreducible elements of art:
shapes, tones, directions, sizes, lines, textures, and
color.”
- Frank Webb
“Writing is not constructed merely from
experiences, information, characters, plots, but
from fundamental artistic elements of grammar.”
- Harry Noden
ACTION VERBS
Go from passive voice to
active voice by deleting
the “BE” verbs.
EXAMPLES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE: The
runaway horse was ridden
into town by an old, whitewhiskered rancher.
NEW SENTENCE: An old,
white whiskered rancher rode
the runaway horse into town.
ANOTHER EXAMPLE
ORIGINAL SENTENCE:
The gravel road was on the left side
of the barn.
NEW SENTENCE:
The gravel road curled around the
left side of the barn.
GUIDED PRACTICE
PAINT WITH ACTION VERBS:
THE SENTENCE: A snake is a slithering creature.
EXAMPLE: The creepy long snake slithered
through the tall grass.
--------------------------------------------------------STUDENTS’ INITIAL SENTENCE:
A motorbike is driving down the street.
STUDENTS’ EXAMPLE:
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BEGINNING PREPOSITIONAL
PHRASES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE: The girl
waved good-bye to her mother’s
plane.
NEW SENTENCE: With tears in
her eyes, the girl waved good-bye
to her mother’s plane.
GUIDED PRACTICE
PAINT WITH BEGINNING PREPOSITIONAL
PHRASES:
EXAMPLE: Through the tall yellow grass,
the creepy snake slithered.
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STUDENTS’ INITIAL SENTENCE:
A motorbike roared down the street.
STUDENTS’ EXAMPLE:
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PAINTING WITH
PARTICIPLES
Imagine in your mind’s eye, a
football player running down a
field.
Try adding an –ing verb at the
beginning of the sentence.
EXAMPLES:
ORIGINAL SENTENCE: The football
player darted down the field.
NEW SENTENCE: Dodging the
tackle and weaving through their
defense, the football player darted
down the field.
GUIDED PRACTICE
PAINTING WITH PARTICIPLES
EXAMPLE: Crisscrossing and sliding, the
creepy snake slithered through the tall
grass.
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STUDENTS’ INITIAL SENTENCE:
Down the street, the motorbike roared.
STUDENTS’ EXAMPLE:
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PAINTING WITH SHIFTED
ADJECTIVES
Adjectives out of order often
amplify the details of an
image.
Professional writers often
shift their adjectives rather
than add them before a noun.
EXAMPLES OF SHIFTED
ADJECTIVES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE:
The usually active and energetic
young boy struggled to reach the third
floor landing.
Usually active and energetic, the
young boy struggled to reach the third
floor landing.
MORE EXAMPLES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE:
The trembling and frightened young
pup scooted under the bed during the
thunderstorm.
NEW SENTENCE:
Trembling and frightened, the young
pup scooted under the bed during the
thunderstorm.
GUIDED PRACTICE
PAINTING WITH SHIFTED
ADJECTIVES
EXAMPLE: Creepy and slimy, the
greenish black snake slithered
through the tall grass.
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STUDENTS’ INITIAL SENTENCE:
The motorbike roared down the
street.
EXAMPLE:
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PAINTING WITH
APPOSITIVES
An appositive is a noun that adds
additional information to a
preceding noun. It provides a
second image, expanding the
details of the image.
EXAMPLES OF
APPOSITIVES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE: The raft
drifted slowly down the
winding river.
NEW SENTENCE: The raft, a skimpy
wooden structure, drifted slowly
down the winding river.
MORE EXAMPLES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE:
The waterfall poured the fresh
pure spray into the creek.
NEW SENTENCE:
The waterfall, a tilted pitcher,
poured the fresh, pure spray into
the creek.
GUIDED PRACTICE
PAINTING WITH APPOSITIVES
EXAMPLE: A poisonous snake, the
creepy rattler, slithered through the tall
grass.
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STUDENTS’ INITIAL SENTENCE:
The motorbike roared down the street.
EXAMPLE:
PAINTING WITH
THE ABSOLUTE
An absolute is a noun
combined with an –ing
verb at the beginning of
the sentence.
EXAMPLES
ORIGINAL SENTENCE:
The dog yawned silently.
NEW SENTENCE:
Paws curling, back stretching, the
dog yawned silently.
GUIDED PRACTICE
PAINTING WITH ABSOLUTES
EXAMPLE: Head rising, body
slithering, the snake threatened the
rat.
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STUDENTS’ INITIAL SENTENCE:
Large and ugly, the swerving
motorbike, a death machine, roared
down the street.
EXAMPLE:
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Brush Strokes Review
Action Verbs: Go from passive voice to active
voice be replacing the “Be” verbs.
Beginning Prepositional Phrases: The girl
waved can change to, With tears in her eyes, the
girl…
Painting with Participles: Add an ing verb at
the beginning of the sentence
The football player darted can change to, Dodging
the tackle and weaving through their defense, the
football player….
Shifted Adjectives: The usually active and
energetic young boy can be changed to:
Usually active and energetic, the young boy….
Painting with Appositives: a noun that adds
additional information
The raft drifted can be changed to:
The raft, a skimpy wooden structure, . . .
Painting with the Absolute: a noun combines
with an -ing verb at the beginning of a sentence
The dog yawned can be changed to:
Paws curling, back stretching, the dog….
REFERENCES
Elbow, Peter (1981). Writing With Power. N.Y.:
Oxford University Press.
Hillerich, Robert L. Teaching Children to Write, K-8.
Englewood Cliffs, N.J.: Prentice Hall, Inc.
Murray, Donald M. (1995). The Craft of Revision.
2nd ed. NY: Harcourt Brace College Publishers.
Noden, Harry. “The Writer As Artist: Basic Brush
Strokes.” Image Grammar. Heineman
Publishing, New Hampshire, 1999.
LESSON PLAN
OBJECTIVES: Incorporate a revision strategy
that will be used to change sentence structure.
READING/WRITING CONNECTION
Rembrandt’s Beret by Johnny Alcorn
Paintings by Stephen Alcorn
EXPLANATION: An introduction of Harry R.
Noden and his approach to integrating the teaching of grammar and
writing.
ACTIVITY 1: Power Point demonstration,
which explains what “brush strokes” are and
how they may be used.
GUIDED PRACTICE:
An example of each of the six brush strokes,
followed by student’s following example by
using each of the brush strokes.
Work as a whole group, creating new sentences on overhead
transparencies.
ACTIVITY 2: Small groups combine brush
strokes, creating their own base sentences.
Share on overhead transparencies.
INDEPENDENT PRACTICE: Incorporate brush
strokes into writing.
SHARE AND DISCUSSION: What are the advantages
of utilizing this strategy? Did it help improve your
sentence structure? Explain how.