Transcript Peer Review Unit 3 EA2

Peer Review
Unit 3
EA2
Analogy of the Day
Lilly:You :: Coach:Athlete
The essay is your game.
I cannot play the game for you.
You can’t replay the game, so you have
to prepare well for it.
YOU have to
physically and mentally do the work.
#1 Requirements
Check 4 parts of prompt:
• focus on one character
• examine response to cultural collision
• analyze how the collision challenges character’s
sense of identity
• explain how this response shapes the MOWAW.
If you’re missing any of these, you’re looking at a C at best.
Avoid plot summary – your audience knows the book.
#2 Complete & Clear
• Read it aloud; have others read it to you. It has to
flow and make sense.
• Look at structure – How do you introduce your
ideas? How do you develop your ideas? How do
you wrap up your ideas? How do you connect to
your reader?
• Look at development – make sure you are fully
explaining and connecting.
Sentence Structure
1. Highlight all “to be” verbs
(is, are, am, was, were, be, been, being)
2. Change them. You will have to revise the
sentence; you can’t merely switch a passive verb
for an active one.
3. Vary your structures. Think about it. What do you
want to emphasize? Consider pacing.
4. Above all, make sure your sentences are complete
and grammatically correct!
Integrating Quotations
• Lead (context and speaker if it’s dialogue)
• Quotation – the meaningful necessary part
• Analysis – follow with your words that explain and
show how this quote is important in developing your
idea.
Analogy – you are a lawyer speaking to a jury. The
quote is the testimony of a witness. The witness gives
his/her statement, but you have to put it in context
and explain to the jury what it means and how it
proves your argument. Just their words popped in
won’t help your case.
Transitions
• The first step in creating good transitions is to have a
good plan. Structure and organization are crucial.
• Use sentence structure in your favor. Blend ideas
with common structures and phrasing (parallelism,
anaphora).
• When you need a transition word/phrase, consider
how one idea is related to the next. Select an
appropriate transition word or phrase…
additionally, however, in contrast, for example, etc.
MLA Format
• 1” margins
• DS (even DS, not extra between paragraphs)
• Heading on page 1 (4 lines)
First Last
Ms. Lilly
Pre-AP English 2, period X
16 February 2017
• Header on every page – upper right (Last #)
If you’re using Google docs, give it room so it’s not
cut off.
• Title (meaningful) centered, same font
• Works Cited page – properly formatted! LOOK IT UP!
Miscellaneous
• Your essay should be in third person.
• Your essay should be in present tense.
• Use the rubric to “grade” it and see what still needs
to be done.
• LRC passes?
• Conferences & Questions
DUE THURSDAY at start of class – top to bottom –
Rubric (SB 222), Final with WC page, RD(s), Plan