Transcript SSR TIME (Did you bring your book, Veronica?)

SSR TIME
(Did you bring your book, Veronica?)
College Prep
3-7-13
GIMME GIMME
0 I would very much like your baby integrity write ups
Read for ME!!!!!!
0 Read “Notes of a Native Speaker”
0 What is Liu defining?
0 What KINDS OF ARGUMENTS is he making
Discuss?!?!?
0 Lets talk this bad boy out…
Image Grammar Refresher
0 Lets take a walk down memory lane……..
Painting with 5 basic brush
strokes
0 Just as the painter combines a wide repertoire of
brush stroke techniques to create an image, the writer
chooses from a repertoire of sentence structures.
Although professionals use an array of complex
structures, students can begin to learn the art of image
grammar by employing the five basic brush strokes.
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Participles
Absolutes
Appositives
Adjectives
Action verbs
Why does this MATTER??!!
0 Not only do the following techniques help you in
fiction writing, they SHOULD be incorporated in nonfiction writing.
0 Students tend to write research papers, expository
papers, etc. without voice, without flavor.
0 Realistically, teachers grade, college entry people
evaluate, and employers judge have to read the same
papers on the same topic (sometimes by the
hundreds). THESE techniques not only make your
writing stronger, they make your writing stand apart
0 And honestly, they make you sound more intelligent.
Painting with Participles
0 Participle: a verbal that functions as an adjective
0 Verbal: a verb form that functions in a sentence as a
noun or modifier rather than as a verb.
0 A more simplified way to explain a participle is: “an
ing verb tagged on the beginning or end of a
sentence.”
Lets look at some examples
0 Picture in your mind, a nest of snakes curling around
some prey.
0 “The diamond-scaled snakes attacked their prey.”
0 Does this sentence create a picture in your mind?
Same thing…with participles
0 “Hissing, slithering, and coiling, the diamond-scaled
snakes attacked their prey.”
0 The participles evoke action. Suddenly, we can see the
snakes coiling and slithering. We feel PART of the
experience.
Participial Phrases
0 Participial Phrases: a participle along with any
modifiers that complete the image.
0 Modifiers: A word, phrase, or clause that functions as
an adjective or adverb to limit or qualify the meaning
of another word or word group.
Combo example and explanation
0 “Hissing their forked red tongues and coiling their
cold bodies, the diamond-scaled snakes attacked their
prey.”
0 Both methods (single participles and participial
phrases) paint more detailed picture.
0 Using the single participles creates rapid movement,
while expanded phrases add details at a slower, but
equally intense pace.
Examples
0 Flying through the air on the wings of a dream, the
Olympic long jumper thrust the weight of his whole
body forward.
0 In this sentence, which is the participle and which is the
modifier?
Examples
0 “Shifting the weight of the line to his left shoulder
and kneeling carefully, he washed his hand in the
ocean and held it there, submerged, for more than a
minute, watching the blood trail away and the
steady movement of the water against his hand as
the boat moved.”
0 -Ernest Hemingway
Absolutes
0 Absolute: a two-word combination-a noun and an ing
or ed verb added onto a sentence.
0 Absolutes utilize verbs; therefore, this brush stroke
also adds action to an image.
Examples
0 “The cat climbed the tree.”
0 Does this work? Does it show or tell?
Good example
0 “Claws digging, feet kicking, the cat climbed the
tree.”
0 Was this better? Show or tell?
Absolute phrases
0 Absolute phrases combine an absolute and a modifier.
0 Modifiers: A word, phrase, or clause that functions as an
adjective or adverb to limit or qualify the meaning of
another word or word group.
0 Absolute phrases are to absolutes as participial
phrases are to participles.
Absolute Phrases Examples
0 “Feet trembling on the snow covered rocks, the
mountain climber edged along the cliff.”
0 Which part of the sentence is the absolute and which
is the modifier?
0 Which is the noun that the absolute phrase
adjective(fies)?
The comma as a telescope
0 Think of that comma as a telescope controller. You
have your basic sentence. Its ok on its own, but there
isn’t enough detail. Use THAT COMMA, and ZOOM in
with it.
0 These participles, participial phrases, absolutes, and
absolute phrases, help you add detail by ZOOMING in
on your topic.
Image Grammar #3
Painting with Appositives
0 An appositive is: A word or phrase that clarifies the
previous word or phrase and expands meaning.
Created to make a statement more clear.
0 For our purposes: a noun that adds a second image
to a preceding noun.
0 Like the absolute, the appositive expand details in the
reader’s mind.
Why is this helpful now?
0 Well, all image grammar is helpful in all form of
writing, but…..
0 Painting with appositives give clarity to your topic.
This is especially helpful when writing a writer needs
to make their subject especially clear
0 Candy for who can guess why this would be good to
use at this time in the semester….
For Example
0 By adding a second image to the noun raccoon in the
sentence “The raccoon enjoys eating turtle eggs,”
the writer/artist can enhance the first image with a
new perspective.
0 IS THIS BETTER:
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0 “The raccoon, a scavenger, enjoys eating turtle
eggs.”
0 Scavenger follows raccoon in the sentence; it’s set of
with commas and enriches the image.
0 The appositive ZOOMS in on the subject, making the
image more complete.
EVEN MORE DETAILS?!
0 Yes, tis true. You can add more!
0 “The raccoon, a midnight scavenger who roams
lake shorelines in search for food, enjoys eating
turtle eggs.”
0 Pretty rad!!!
How the masters do it
0 Observe how Cornelius Ryan uses appositives in June
6, 1944: The Longest Day.
0 He could have written: “A phalanx of ships and planes
bore down on Hitler’s Europe,” but instead, Ryan
expanded the image with appositives and then
extended the picture with further specific examples.
RYAN
0 Plowing through the choppy gray waters, a
phalanx of ships bore down on Hitler's Europe:
fast new attack transports, slow rust-scarred
freighters, small ocean liners, channel steamers,
hospital ships, weather-beaten tankers, and
swarms of fussing tugs. Barrage balloons flew
above the ships. Squadrons of fighter planes
weaved below the clouds. And surrounding this
cavalcade of ships packed with men, guns, tanks,
and motor vehicles, and supplies came a
formidable array of 702 warships
Your turn
0 Using the Lui’s topic from “Notes of a Native Son,”
write his definition of the topic using
APPOSITIVES!!!!!!
0 Best one gets candy