Transcript Revision Checklistx

Today’s Revision
Checklist:
OMAM Literary Critique
First, let’s check your
organization…
 Highlight the thesis statement
 Check the length. Is it at least
in yellow.
two pages
long? Are there multiple paragraphs?
 Highlight each connection to OMAM in
blue. Is there a page number (in
parentheses) for each reference?
 Highlight each connection to another
source in pink.
 Let’s find out how to cite our parenthetical
and bibliographic sources.
Read the opposing argument &
rebuttal. Do they make sense?
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First, find them in the essay and highlight
them in yellow.
Next, draw a  if the opposing argument
and rebuttal are effective.
Draw a  if the point of view is unclear or
if the logic falls apart.
Moving on to focus & content…
Put an orange star next to each
connection that obviously connects to the
thesis.
 Use an orange question mark for
connections that need a little TLC. You
need to explain more than you think
you should! Don’t just hit and run!
 Be sure to sandwich your quotes
between your own ideas.
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Let’s talk pronouns!
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First person pronouns (I, me, my, mine, we,
us, our, ours) should almost never be used in
expository writing, unless it is a direct
quotation.
Second person pronouns (you, your, yours)
should be treated like a disease. Pretend you
have a stockpile of cheese that has to last
you from now until the end of the year, and
second person pronouns are rats. They must
be exterminated at all costs!
Here’s the difference that losing
the pronouns can make:
BAD PRONOUN USAGE:
When you go to the Dominican Republic, you
should rent a surfboard.
BETTER PRONOUN USAGE:
Renting a surfboard makes the Dominican
Republic more fun.
Now, read for conventions…
Use the green highlighter to highlight all
first and second person pronouns,
contractions, and improper usage errors.
Be on the lookout for “I think…” and
“you” most of all!
 Then, use the green highlighter and
editor’s marks to correct any other issues
with conventions.
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Where do I go from here?
Is your thesis statement an actual statement?
 Do you have enough blue OMAM connections?
Academic classes need at least five; Honors
needs at least eight connections.
 Do you have enough pink external connections?
Academic classes need at least three;
Honors needs at least four connections.
 Are those connections/quotes sandwiched
between your ideas?
 Are they cited parenthetically with accurate page
numbers?
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Where do I go from here?
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Is your paper free of first and second person
pronouns? There are lots of ways to change
this feature of your writing; try referring to
“the reader” or “one” instead of “you.”
Are there other grammatical issues to
address? Look for comma use, spelling,
capitalization, etc.
Sitting down with me in a one-on-one
conference is a great next step! Get a
tutoring pass and we’ll take a closer look at
your work. 