Transcript Embedding Quotes

Embedding Quotes
MRS. KIRK
LANGUAGE ARTS
What is embedding?
 Embedding a quote involves
seamlessly incorporating the author’s
words into your own sentence
structure, rather than placing the
quote in its own awkward sentence.
A few successfully embedded quotes:
 Lennie is shockingly large, “a huge man,
shapeless of face, with pale eyes” (2) who
does not understand his own strength.
A few successfully embedded quotes:
 Lennie had the mental disability, whereas
Candy’s dog was getting very old, and as
Carlson put it, wasn’t “no good to himself”
(45). They both needed to die because if
they kept living they’d just cause more
themselves more pain.
A few successfully embedded quotes:
 The next realization comes in the form of a rabbit,
who tells Lennie that George is “sick of [him], he’s
gonna beat the hell outta [him] and then go away
and leave [him]” (102).
 **Brackets [ ] are placed around changed pronouns
or verbs; you may change pronouns and verb
tenses so they fit context of your sentence. Simply
put the change in brackets [ ].
Fixing poorly incorporated quotes
 Revise each of the following passages by
embedding the quotes. Feel free to add or
delete or revise or combine words, phrases,
and sentences.
 Remember, include the quote into your own
sentence. Avoid the “this means” strategy.
Revise by embedding
 “You never had none you crazy bastard. I
got both of ‘em here. Think I’d let you
carry your own work card?” (5). This
shows that Lennie cannot take care of his
own things.
Revised
 Lennie cannot take care of his own
things; when Lennie thinks he has
misplaced his work card, George
taunts “Think I’d let you carry your
own work card?” (5).
Revise by embedding
1.
“What’s the matter with me? she cried.
‘Ain’t I got a right to talk to nobody’” (87).
What John Steinbeck is trying to imply
with this quote is that Curley’s wife is
ignored by all of the farm workers.
Revised
1. Ignored by all the ranch hands, Curley’s
wife desperately wonders,“What’s the
matter with me?...Ain’t I got a
right to talk to nobody” (87).
Revise by embedding
 Curely’s wife entertains herself by
maliciously commenting on how she will
have Crooks hanged by his neck before he
ever speaks to her again, and by tempting
Lennie with her words. (“O.K. Machine. I’ll
talk to you later. I like machines.” (80) This
is after realizing that Lennie is the machine
that broke Curley’s hand.)
Revised
 Curely’s wife, after realizing it was
Lennie—not a machine--that broke
Curley’s hand , tauntingly remarks
to Lennie, “I like machines” (80).
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 George also knows that his life would be so
much easier without Lennie. “God ‘a
mighty, if I was alone I could live so easy. I
could get a job and work, an’ no trouble”
(11). This is what George says to Lennie.
Revised
 Because of the trouble Lennie
often causes, George sometimes
thinks that “if [he] was alone [he]
could live so easy. [He] could get a
job and work, an’ no trouble” (11).
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 Crooks shows some of these same feelings
while he is talking to Lennie. “A guy goes
nuts if he ain’t got nobody. Don’t make no
difference who the guy is, long’s he with
you” (72). This shows just how much Crooks
wants a friend and how he feels, how he
really wants someone to talk to every once in
a while, and how he wants to be thought of
as normal.
Revised
 Crooks is jealous of Lennie and
George’s relationship and believes
that“A guy goes nuts if he ain’t got
nobody. Don’t make no difference
who the guy is” (72).
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 George realized that he should be the one to
kill Lennie; he learned from Candy’s
mistake. “I ought to shot that dog myself,
George. I shouldn’t ought to let no stranger
shoot my dog” (61). This lesson influenced
George’s difficult decision to be the one to
take Lennie’s life.
Revised
 George remembers Candy’s lesson: “I
ought to shot that dog myself, George.
I shouldn’t ought to let no stranger
shoot my dog” (61). It must be
George, and no stranger, who shoots
Lennie.
 Just as Candy “ought to shot [his] dog
[himself]” (61), George must be the
one to shoot Lennie.
Embedding Quotes
 Remember, do not throw in a quote as its own
random sentence!
 Good writers can manipulate their sentences so the
quote is embedded into their own sentence
structure!
 PS: Make sure you cite correctly, too!