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CM 220
College Composition II
Unit 9: Presenting Your “Big
Idea” to the World
Jeff Kosse
General Education, Composition
Kaplan University
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Reading
Invention Lab
The Final Project
ASSIGNMENTS
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Unit 9 Reading
• The Kaplan Guide to Successful
Writing, ch. 14 (196-204) and ch. 17
• Review the website for Food, Inc.
• Review the selected Writing Center
resources (see the Extra, Extra! tab
for links)
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Invention Lab
• Describe a common editing concern you have (passive
voice, apostrophes, commas, fragments) and how the
selection from The Kaplan Guide to Successful
Writing or the Writing Center helped clarify any
questions you had.
• Discuss any other challenges you face as you revise
and edit your portfolio this week and prepare the
multi-modal component of your final project.
• Respond to two classmates. Note resources that might
help your classmate address the challenges mentioned
in the post and mention any questions you still have
about your classmate’s big idea.
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The Final Project Portfolio
• 5-7 page revision of draft (unit 6)
• Revision of letter to editor (unit 5
invention lab)
• Revision of tech presentation (unit 7
invention lab)
• Responses to reflection questions
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Reminders
• The 5-7 length is just for the essay; this does not include the title
and references page, letter to editor, presentation, or reflection
questions.
• The letter to the editor will be approximately ½ to 1 page, as will the
responses to the reflection questions.
• Put all components in one Word document unless you need to post
a separate file for the presentation (such as a Power Point). If you
have an external link, include that in the Word document. See the
sample posted in the unit 9 folder of Doc Sharing.
• Review the grading rubric and assignment instructions carefully!
See the correct rubric in Doc Sharing (unit 9 folder).
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Guidelines for Essay
• Essay must be a SUBSTANTIAL revision of
the draft you wrote in unit 6. Simply adding a
few sentences is not sufficient.
• Arguments should be defended-remember
that the goal in persuasion is to convince your
audience of the value of your position.
• Consider and respond to counter arguments
• Aim for strong, clear, readable sentences.
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Guidelines for Letter to Editor
• You will revise the letter to the editor (or
formal message to another audience) you
wrote for the unit 5 invention lab.
• Take into account questions raised by
your instructor and classmates as you
revise the message. How can you make it
more compelling for your audience?
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Guidelines for Multi-Modal/Tech
Presentation
• The audience for this presentation of your ideas is WIDER than the
audience of your actual paper.
• How will this affect the presentation of information?
• Remember to take into account the suggestions you received in unit
7.
• Have at least 5 specific facts/ideas supported with evidence.
• Be sure to cite sources. You can have those listed on your main
References page.
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Reflection Questions
• What did you learn about yourself as a writer? As
a thinker?
• What did you learn about the process of writing?
• What skills did you develop that might help you in
the future?
• What did you take from the larger conversation
with others?
• How did your feedback from peers and your
instructor affect the revision of your blueprint,
letter to the editor, and presentation?
• Write responses in paragraph form.
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Food, Inc.
• Analyze the audience and purpose of this
presentation of information.
• What is the purpose and how is it
accomplished?
• How is the audience addressed?
• How does the METHOD of presentation affect
how this information is given to the audience?
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The Paramedic Method
Seven Steps for Revision
EDITING SENTENCES
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Paramedic Revision
• Paramedic Revision is a sentence level
revision strategy that helps to make writing
more clear and concise.
• It revives tired, wordy, and awkward sentences
and makes them more readable
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Steps
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Circle the prepositions (of, in, about, for, onto, into)
Draw a box around the "is" verb forms
Ask, "Where's the action?"
Change the "action" into a simple verb
Move the doer into the subject (Who's kicking
whom)
• Eliminate any unnecessary slow wind-ups
• Eliminate any redundancies. (“Paramedic Revision,”
2010).
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• Who is doing the acting?
What is the action?
An Example
• Are there any
The point I wish
to make is that
unnecessary phrases?
the employees
• Could any prepositional
working at this
phrases
be
more
concise?
company are in
• Actor: Employees
need of a much
better manager of • Action: Need
their money.
• Direct object: manager
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Revision
• This company’s employees
need a better money
manager.
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Try revising this. . .
• After reviewing the results of your
previous research, and in light of the
relevant information found within
the context of the study, there is
ample evidence for making
important, significant changes to our
operating procedures.
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Seven Steps (The Kaplan Guide to
Successful Writing, pp. 196-204)
1. Choose verbs carefully--they convey the action in your
paper and should be vivid and compelling.
Highlight being verbs (am, is, are, was, be, etc.). Try to
eliminate as many as possible since they are considered
"weak" verbs.
Highlight "to have" verbs (has, have, had). Again, try to
remove those.
Try to choose active, vigorous verbs whenever possible.
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Seven Steps
2. Take out unnecessary prepositions.
3. Make sure sentence lengths vary.
You don't want too many very long or
very short sentences.
4. Make sure all pronouns (it, they,
everyone, etc.) have a clear reference.
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Seven Steps
5. Try to limit the use of pronouns who,
which, and that.
6. Limit the use of "qualifier" words like
really, every, very.
7. Take out cliches (children are our future,
etc.)
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Editing
• Try out this quiz for
eliminating wordiness:
Let’s try
revising sentences from
your drafts
• http://grammar.ccc.com
mnet.edu/grammar/quiz
zes/nova/nova8.htm
Questions?
• Let’s open the seminar up to any
questions you may have about the final
project requirements.
• Remember that there is NO seminar in
unit 10, but we will have a final chance to
share projects and discuss the Big Ideas
you have all proposed this term!
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