Transcript Welcome to Seminar 5: Introductions & Conclusions

Welcome to Seminar 9
CM220 – Thursday, June 14th @ 10:00 PM EST
We’ll begin on time.
Meanwhile, have fun chatting.
“Those who bring sunshine to the lives
of others cannot keep it from
themselves.”
James Matthew Barrie
(creator of Peter Pan)
Unit 9 Reading
The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing, ch. 14
(196-204) and ch. 17
 Review the website for Food, Inc.
 Review the selected Writing Center resources
(see the Extra, Extra! tab for links)
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Unit 9 Invention Lab
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Describe a common editing concern you have
(passive voice, apostrophes, commas, fragments)
and how the selection from The Kaplan Guide to
Successful Writing or the Writing Center helped
clarify any questions you had.
Discuss any other challenges you face as you revise
and edit your portfolio this week and prepare the multimodal component of your final project. (200-250 words)
Respond to two classmates. Note resources that
might help your classmate address the challenges
mentioned in the post and mention any questions you
still have about your classmate’s big idea. (100 words
per peer response)
The Final Project Portfolio
5-7 page revision of draft
(unit 6)
 Revision of letter to editor
(unit 5 invention lab)
 Revision of tech
presentation (unit 7
invention lab)
 Responses to reflection
questions
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Reminders:
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The 5-7 length is just for the essay; this does not
include the title and references page, letter to editor,
presentation, or reflection questions.
The letter to the editor will be approximately ½ to 1
page, as will the responses to the reflection
questions.
Put all components in one Word document unless
you need to post a separate file for the presentation
(such as a Power Point). If you have an external link,
include that in the Word document. See the sample
posted in the unit 9 folder of Doc Sharing.
Review the grading rubric and assignment
instructions carefully! See the rubric in the syllabus.
Let’s break down the Final
Project.
What questions do you have
at this point?
The Essay (5-7 pages + title page)
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Essay must be a SUBSTANTIAL revision
of the draft you wrote in unit 6. Simply
adding a few sentences is not sufficient..
Arguments should be defended-remember
that the goal in persuasion is to convince
your audience of the value of your
position.
Consider and respond to counter
arguments
Aim for strong, clear, readable sentences.
Letter to Editor (1/2-1 page)
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You will revise the letter to the
editor (or formal message to
another audience) you wrote for
the unit 5 invention lab.
Take into account questions raised
by your instructor and classmates
as you revise the message. How
can you make it more compelling
for your audience?
Tech Presentation
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The audience for this presentation of your
ideas is WIDER than the audience of your
actual paper.
How will this affect the presentation of
information?
Remember to take into account the
suggestions you received in unit 7.
Have at least 5 specific facts/ideas
supported with evidence.
Be sure to cite sources. You can have those
listed on your main References page.
Reflection Questions (1/2 – 1 page)
What did you learn about yourself as a writer? As
a thinker?
 What did you learn about the process of writing?
 What skills did you develop that might help you in
the future?
 What did you take from the larger conversation
with others?
 How did your feedback from peers and your
instructor affect the revision of your blueprint,
letter to the editor, and presentation?
 Write responses in paragraph form.
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Reference Page (1/2 – 2 pages)
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Your research paper must directly refer to at
least five sources (in the paper's text, not just
on the references page).
At least two should be scholarly books or
articles, and at least one of those should
come from the Kaplan library.
ALL sources must be CREDIBLE!
Your final project research paper must
include a references page containing all
sources referenced in your paper and
presentation.
You can view models of these in the Writing
Center's reading, APA Manuscript Style and
Sample APA Research Paper.
Format Review (slide 1)
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All 4 components are present: formal
paper, letter to editor, tech
presentation, & reflection questions
12 pt. Arial or Times New Roman font.
1 inch margins all around.
Double spaced.
Should contain an APA-style formatted
title page.
All pages should have header and page
numbers.
Correct parenthetical (in text) citations
for all quotes and paraphrases.
Format Review (slide 2)
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All direct quotes have either page or
paragraph numbers listed in the parenthetical
citation.
Should contain 5 credible sources (minimum).
All cited sources have dates of publication
(use n.d. if no date is present).
Titles of books/journals/websites/newspapers
are italicized on the reference page and in the
paper.
Article titles are placed in quotation marks
within the body of the paper (not on the
reference page).
Quotes over 40 words are block indented.
What is your editing strategy?
Have you ever applied the
Paramedic method?
Paramedic Method:
Paramedic Revision is a sentence level
revision strategy that helps to make writing
more clear and concise.
 It revives tired, wordy, and awkward sentences
and makes them more readable
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Steps to the process:
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Circle the prepositions (of, in, about, for, onto, into)
Draw a box around the "is" verb forms (be, being, been,
is, am, are, was, were)
Ask, "Where's the action?"
Change the "action" into a simple verb
Move the doer into the subject (Who's kicking whom)
Eliminate any unnecessary slow wind-ups
Eliminate any redundancies. (“Paramedic Revision,”
2010).
Example:
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The point I
wish to make
is that the
employees
working at this
company are
in need of a
much better
manager of
their money.
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Who is doing the acting? What
is the action?
Are there any unnecessary
phrases?
Could any prepositional
phrases be more concise?
Actor: Employees
Action: Need
Direct object: manager
Revision:
This company’s employees
need a better money
manager.
WORDY SENTENCE:
Let's Practice:
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After reviewing the
results of your
previous research,
and in light of the
relevant information
found within the
context of the study,
there is ample
evidence for making
important, significant
changes to our
operating procedures.
QUESTIONS:
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Who is doing the
acting? What is the
action?
Are there any
unnecessary phrases?
Could any
prepositional phrases
be more concise?
Actor:
Action:
Direct object:
Seven Steps to Easy Revision
(The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing, pp. 196-204)
7 Steps to Easy Revision
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Choose verbs carefully--they convey
the action in your paper and should be
vivid and compelling.
Highlight being verbs (am, is, are, was, be,
etc.). Try to eliminate as many as possible since
they are considered "weak" verbs.
Highlight "to have" verbs (has, have, had).
Again, try to remove those.
Try to choose active, vigorous verbs whenever
possible.
7 Steps to Easy Revision
2. Take out unnecessary
prepositions.
3. Make sure sentence
lengths vary. You don't want
too many very long or very
short sentences.
4. Make sure all pronouns (it,
they, everyone, etc.) have a
clear reference.
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5. Try to limit the use of
pronouns who, which, and
that.
6. Limit the use of "qualifier"
words like really, every, very.
7. Take out cliches (children
are our future, etc.)
Jayme's Editing Reminders:
No second person (you, your) point of
view is present in paper or letter to editor.
 No first person (I, me, my, mine, our, we,
us) point of view is present in paper or
letter to editor.
 No contractions used in formal writing.
 The term “thing” was not used (try to find a
more descriptive term).
 Pronoun tenses are correct
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Quiz Time!
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out this quiz for eliminating
wordiness:
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar
/quizzes/nova/nova8.htm
Questions??
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Let’s open the seminar up to any questions you may
have about the final project requirements.
Remember that there is NO seminar in unit 10, but we
will have a final chance to share projects and discuss the
Big Ideas you have all proposed this term!
The final paper is due: Tuesday, June 19th.
I will accept late work until, Saturday, June 23rd
If you would like me to review your work before
submitting for a grade, you can email me your project.
Please do so by Saturday, June 16th so that I will have
time to provide you with feedback.
THANK YOU all so much for attending!!
I have enjoyed working with you all this term.
I can’t wait to read your final projects!
If you think of questions later, please email me at:
[email protected]
THAT’S ALL FOR UNIT 9!