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Writing Teacher: Li Dongying (李冬英) Class: Class Three, Grade Nine Date: May 26, 2009 1.A good beginning is half done. 好的开端是成功的一半。 2.Where there is a will, there is a way. 有志者，事竟成 。 3.Failure is the mother of success. 失败是成功之母。 4.Great hopes make great men. 伟大的理想造就伟大的人物。 5.A candle lights others and consumes itself. 蜡烛照亮了别人，却烧尽了自己。 6.Honesty is the best policy. 做人诚信为本。 02 1.A good beginning is half done. 好的开端是成功的一半。 2.Where there is a will, there is a way. 有志者，事竟成 。 3.Failure is the mother of success. 失败是成功之母。 4.Great hopes make great men. 伟大的理想造就伟大的人物。 5.A candle lights others and consumes itself. 蜡烛照亮了别人，却烧尽了自己。 6.Honesty is the best policy. 做人诚信为本。 02 Things I hate to do I hate to keep pets and tell lies. The 题材： 写事 thing that I hate most is smoking. As we all know, smoking is not only bad for ourselves but also harmful to 时态： 一般现在时 others. Whenever my father smokes, I feel rather sick. Besides, it is a waste 人称： 第一人称 I of money to smoke. What’s more, smoking pollutes the air. So I hate smoking most. 要点：Why? (the reasons) 03 Things I hate to do I hate to keep pets and tell lies. The thing that I hate most is smoking. As Things I hate to do Introduction keep pets、tell lies we all know, smoking is not only bad for ourselves but also harmful to Center hate smoking most others. Whenever my father smokes, I feel rather sick. Besides, it is a waste of money to smoke. What’s more, smoking pollutes the air. So I hate smoking most. Reasons harmful、 pollute air waste money、 sick Conclusion hate smoking most 05 Things I hate to do I hate to keep pets and tell lies. The 1. 全文无语法错误 thing that I hate most is smoking. As 2. 点题并紧扣主题 we all know, smoking is not only bad for ourselves but also harmful to others. Whenever my father smokes, I feel rather sick. Besides, it is a waste of money to smoke. What’s more, 3. 层次清晰 层层递进 4. 句子完整 好词颇多 smoking pollutes the air. So I hate smoking most. 06 1. Comprehend (审题) 2. Outline (提纲) 3. Write (写作) 4. Correct (修改) 39 The person I respect ( 我最敬佩的人) Use the following points as a guide. (下列要点仅供参考) Who’s the person you respect? Why do you respect him/her? What will you learn from him/her? 题 材 写人 时态 一般现在时、 要点 一般过去时 人称 第三人称(he/she) Why? (reasons) 09 The person I respect Part one The person I respect is… Who…? (famous person、 family member、teacher、friend…) excellent performance never give up (main body) Part two Why…? super star (Jay Chou) successful confident cool… Part three What…? I will learn from him/her and try to … (work hard/be honest/be responsible…) 16 The person I respect 题材 写人 时态一般现在时 Part one 人称第三人称(he/she) 要点 Why? (reasons) Who…? (The person I respect is…) famous person、family member、 teacher、 friend… excellent performance Part two Why…? supe r star never give up、confident (Jay Chou) successful、cool… Part three What…? (I will learn from him/her and try to …) work hard/be honest/be responsible… 21 大小写错误 The person I respect is 名词单复数错误 was The person I respect my brother. He is does born in 1982. He do well in all his subjects singing 拼写错误 动词时态错误 many and he is also good at sing. He has much friends. He even with the famous singer Sha Baoliang sha baoliang had dinner before. My He even had dinner with the famous singer Sha Baoliang before. brother has won a lot of awards and he 主谓一致错误 has set a good exmple for me. I will learn 词组固定搭配用错 from him! example Chinglish 现象 24 单词：拼写错误、大小写错误、名词单复数错误 句子：动词时态、主谓一致、 Chinglish现象 词组固定搭配错误 25-27 The person I respect is my brother. He was born in 1982. First, he He does well in all his subjects and he is also good at What’s more, he For example, he singing. He has many friends. He even had dinner with In addition, my the famous singer Sha Baoliang before. My brother has won a lot of awards and he has set a good example for Where there is a will, there is a way. me. I will learn from him! and I hope I will be as super as him! 28 1.正确运用连接词，使层次更清晰，条理更清楚。 (1) 顺序： first、secondly、finally… (2) 递进： besides、in addition、what’s more… (3) 转折： however、but、although… (4) 对比： on the other hand… (5) 原因： because of、now that、… (6) 结果： therefore、as a result… (7) 举例： for example、such as… (8) 总结： in a word、as you can see… 30 2.适当运用名言，使文章更出彩。 A good beginning is half done. Where there is a will, there is a way. Failure is the mother of success. Great hopes make great men. A candle lights others and consumes itself. Honesty is the best policy. 30-33 37 Topics on “person” My favourite super star A great person I want to thank______ A famous person My good friend/classmate… A popular person My family member (father/mother…) A successful person… 38 1. Comprehend (审题) 2. Outline (提纲) 3. Write (写作) 4. Correct (修改) 39 Finish the passage “When I met a difficulty” according to the four steps. 40 When I met a difficulty （当我碰到困难时 ） Use the following points as a guide. （必须包括下列要点） What difficulty did you meet? Describe how you faced and overcame it. How did you feel after you overcame it? 题 材 写事 人称 第一人称(I) 时态 一般过去时 要点 How? (ways) When I met a difficulty Part one What…? (My difficulty was…) poor study、bad health、 not good at sports、 having an argument with… Part two How…? (main body) poor study Part three What…? (I felt happy/exciting…)