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Power Writing
Mrs. McDermott
YHS
By Using Three Numbers, Power
Writing Assigns the Value of:
• 1st Power- Main ideas, topic sentences, and
topic paragraphs
• 2nd Power- Major details that explain main
ideas
• 3rd power- Minor details that elaborate upon
or clarify details
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Stage 1 Word Power
Stage 2 Phrase Power
Stage 3 Sentence Power
Stage 4 Powergraph 122
Stage 5 Powergraph 12323
Stage 6 Powergraph 12323- Active Voice (No
“to be” verbs)
• Stage 7 Sentence Patterns
• 1232323, 1233233233,etc. Powergraphs
Stage 1-Word Power
1. Cities
2. Roads
3. Families
4. Disasters
5. Music
6. Friends
7. Games
8. Lies
9. Vacations
10. Jobs
Roads
Stage 2- Phrase Power
• A phrase a NOT a complete sentence
1. big cities in Arizona
2. roads in Buckeye
3. famous families
4. major national disasters
5. music I like
• Turn the rest of the words in stage 1 into
phrases
Stage-3 Sentence Power
• For our purposes right now, all stage 3
sentences will start with “there are two”
• Turn your phrases into “there are two”
sentences
1. There are two big cities in Arizona I like to
visit.
2. There are two major roads in Buckeye.
3. There are two famous families I admire.
• Turn the rest of your phrases into “there
are two” sentences
More Stage-3 Practice
• Turn the following phrases into “there
are two” sentences
1. Countries of Europe
2. Names of children
3. Leaders of the world
4. Professional sports in America
5. States in the southwest
6. Fast cars
7. Movies for children
8. Stores in Buckeye
Stage 4 122
• After practicing power 1 (topic) sentences we
are ready to move on to stage 4
• A power 2 represents concrete detail. Here
you mention specifically what you are talking
about
• You will use transitions followed by a comma
Major Transitions
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For example
For instance
To clarify
Additionally
First- NO such word as firstly
Second (ly)
Third (ly)
Basically
Set up
• Power 1= “There are two…” sentence
• Power 2= Name the two things (the support)
• (1) There are two mean teachers at BUHS.
• So now name the two teachers in a complete
sentence (make sure you have a verb)
• (2) To begin, Ms. Ramey is wickedly evil.
• (2) Finally, her brother, Mr. Ramey, yells at us
all the time.
Example
• Cities
• Cities in Arizona
(1) There are two cities in Arizona I would like to
visit .
(2) For example, Flagstaff is home to many unique
things.
(2) Furthermore, Phoenix has a lot of entertaining
things to do.
Another Example
• Roads
• Roads in Buckeye
(1) There are two roads in Buckeye the police
always watch.
(2) First, there is MC85 which cuts through
the town.
(2) Next, Miller Road always has people
speeding down it.
Stage 5 12323
1= Topic Sentence
2=Concrete Detail (supporting the topic sentence)
3=Commentary- More specific explanations
Example
• Word= Students
(1)There are two students I am very close to.
(2) First, there is Danny.
(3) Specifically, I have had him in class for the last
three years for journalism, English 4, AP Lit and
Comp, and English 101-102.
(2) Next, I am very close to Ryan.
(3) For example, sometimes we hang out after
school and talk about our problems.
Another Example
(1)There are two cities in Arizona I would like to
visit.
(2) For example, Flagstaff is home to many unique
things.
(3) Specifically, there is NAU and Snow Bowl.
(2) Furthermore, Phoenix has a lot of entertaining
things to do.
(3) For instance, we can go to an AZ Diamondback
baseball game.
Your Turn
• Take the phrase “stores in Buckeye” and make
a 12323 powergraph
• Label each sentence as a 1,2, or 3
Turn these phrases into a 12323
1. students at school
2. tasty foods
3. things that stink (don’t use bad words)
4. fun things
5. attractive people
No, There Are Two Sentences
• Develop a 12323 powergraph without the use
of “There are two”
• Olympics
• Candy
• Cell Phones
Stage 6- “no to be verbs”
• The passive voice in writing is boring and
imprecise.
• By using an active voice your writing comes
alive and becomes more detailed.
“To Be” or passive verbs
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Be
Is
Are
Were
Was
Being
Been
Am
Example powergraph
• I enjoy shopping at two different stores in
Buckeye
• First, you can always find everything you need
at Wal-Mart.
• For example, they have food, clothes, and
sporting goods.
• Next, Fry’s carries a wide variety of foods.
• Specifically, they sell chips, cereal, and steak.
Your turn: Turn these passive sentences
into active ones (hint, the rewrite may be
shorter than the original)
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Mike is a student
I am a writer
Sandra and Ryan are happy
Maria was here yesterday
Brandon and Erik were absent
Martin is being naughty
Sophia has been here all day
More Practice
8. I’m reading the book The Great Gatsby
9. We’re going to have fun this semester.
10. They’re having their party over there.
11. I am playing in a tournament this weekend.
12. Jose will be getting an A for the class.
13. Mr. Seward can be very talkative at times.
14. We are going to BUHS in order to learn.
Stage 7 Sentence Patterns- for use
on power one sentences
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Strong, active verb
Ask a question
Use an exclamatory sentence
Open with an adverb
Open with a prepositional phrase
Open with an adverbial clause
Use parallel structure
Use apposition
Strong Active Verb Examples
• Two problems perplexed the students
• The police dogs patrolled two areas
• Cats purr for two strange reasons
A question
• What two places in the world would I like to
visit?
• What two types of candy do I like?
• Where would I like to go to college?
An Exclamation
• Wow, two happy events occurred in my life!
• Two terrible things happened today!
• I want a ride on a camel for two reasons!
Prepositional Phrase Opener
• In Southern California, a tourist will find two
unique spots of interest.
• Through my magic glasses, I saw two
awesome sights.
• Down the street, live two interesting people.
Apposition
• Buckeye, a suburb of Phoenix, offers its
residence two fun activities.
• Ramey, my English teacher, appears weird for
two reasons.
• Chipotle, my favorite restaurant, makes two
real tasty dishes.
Parallel Structure
• Washing dishes, cleaning house, and doing
laundry annoy me for two reasons.
• Listening in class, following directions, and
finishing assignments make me proud of
myself in two ways.
• Baseball, hockey, and football excite me for
two reasons.
Adverbial Clause Opener
• If I was lost, I would do two things.
• While I shopped for clothes, I discovered two
ways to save money.
• After Ramey gave us homework, the class
thanked him for two things.
Adverb Opener
• Wisely, Sam made two course decisions.
• Happily, she made her parents proud for two
reasons.
• Suddenly, as I slept in the woods late at night,
I heard two strange noises.
Your Turn
• Using each type of sentence pattern (8) label
the sentence pattern and write a power one
sentence for the following:
– Classes at school
– Strong Active Verb Example
– Choosing two elective classes at school proved
exciting
Stage 8
• Stage 8 wraps everything up.
• Keep doing what you’ve been doing but you
are just adding more detail
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• 1232323
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1232323 example
• (1)In the morning, I do three things before I go
to school. (2) First, I wake up. (3) For example,
my alarm is set at 7:04 am. (2) Next, I brush
my teeth. (3) Specifically, I use Crest
toothpaste. (2) Finally, I fix my hair. (3) For
instance, I wet my hair, then rub some hair
glue to give it a spiky look.
1233233233 Example
• (1)BUHS should have a closed campus for all
students. (2)First of all, safety should be the
number one concern. (3) For example,
students are in a rush during lunch and may
exceed the speed limit. (3) Moreover, every
year there is at least one major car accident
involving students during lunch.
1233233233 Example
• (2) Next, a closed campus helps limit people
ditching. (3) Specifically, when a student is
forced to stay on campus during lunch, they
are more likely to go to their next class. (3)
Statistically, more students ditch during fourth
period than any other period.
1233233233 Example
• (2) Finally, in order to make a closed campus
work, the school needs to provide more food
choices. (3) For instance, they could create a
food court. (3) Moreover, the school could ask
Subway, Pizza Hut, and McDonalds to set up
stations to serve the students.
Your Turn
• Write a 1232323 powergraph on your
thoughts about a closed campus using a
strong active verb sentence pattern.
• Write a 1233233233 powergraph about
something that’s happened in your life using a
strong active verb or question sentence
pattern.