Transcript Sr. Paper Peer Revision #2

Regents Essay Peer Revision #2
Pass the paper.
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Check MLA format
12 pt. TIMES New Roman, double-spaced
MLA heading
MLA page numbering- also TIMES
1” margins
Centered title
Pass the paper.
• Read the introduction and check for the
following organization:
– Attention grabber/ Quotation
– Transition
– Thesis statement– two pieces of literature plus the
authors plus the literary element
• Draw a box around the literary element
Pass the paper.
• Read the introduction.
• Check for “be” verbs and casual language– put
an X over any of the following:
– I/ you/ we/ us/ yours/ me/ my/ mine
– Am, is, are, was, were, be, being, been
– Clichés/ idioms/ too casual language
– Vague language such as the word “things” or
“stuff”
Pass the paper.
• Read the introduction.
• Check for rhetorical devices:
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Parallel structure
Anaphora
Epistrophe
Antithesis
Dash
• If you see it, make sure it’s used “on purpose” and
correctly.
• If you don’t see it, tell them a good place to add a
rhetorical device.
Pass the paper.
• Locate the thesis statement and check for the
FIRST piece of literature listed.
• Then check the topic sentence of Body
Paragraph #1– it should be about that piece of
literature.
• If the thesis is NOT in order and the first piece
of literature is not actually first, please tell
them to reorder it.
Same person.
• Read Body Paragraph #1 and check for the
following order:
– Topic sentence– piece of lit/ thematic idea/
literary element
– Quote #1/ Evidence #1
– Commentary (at least 2 sentences)
– Quote #2/ Evidence #2
– Commentary (at least 2 sentences)
– Concluding sentence
Pass the paper.
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Body Paragraph #1– check the quotations.
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Each quote should be BLENDED with TCS.
– Transition
– Context
– Speaker
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The TCS must come BEFORE the quote!
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C = PLOT/ not a chapter number or page number
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Label the TCS of EACH quote! If any part is missing, tell them to add it in.
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If they did not use quotes, make sure that they have NOT just written pure plot
summary– this will automatically FAIL the essay on the Regents.
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MLA citations NOT NEEDED.
Same person.
• Body Paragraph #1– Concluding sentence.
• Make sure the paragraph has a concluding
sentence that rephrases the TOPIC SENTENCE
ideas, including the THEME
• Make sure this sentence uses DIFFERENT
WORDS than the THESIS and TOPIC SENTENCE
Pass the paper.
• Body Paragraph #1– editing.
• Read the paragraph and circle any grammar/
spelling errors that you see.
• Cross out any “be” verbs and any cases of first
or second person pronouns (quotes excluded).
Pass the paper.
• Read Body Paragraph #2 and check for the
following order:
– Topic sentence– piece of lit/ thematic idea/
literary element
– Quote #1/ Evidence #1
– Commentary (at least 2 sentences)
– Quote #2/ Evidence #2
– Commentary (at least 2 sentences)
– Concluding sentence
Same person.
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Body Paragraph #2– check the quotations.
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Each quote should be BLENDED with TCS.
– Transition
– Context
– Speaker
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The TCS must come BEFORE the quote!
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C = PLOT/ not a chapter number or page number
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Label the TCS of EACH quote! If any part is missing, tell them to add it in.
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If they did not use quotes, make sure that they have NOT just written pure plot
summary– this will automatically FAIL the essay on the Regents.
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MLA citations NOT NEEDED.
Pass the paper.
• Body Paragraph #2– editing.
• Read the paragraph and circle any grammar/
spelling errors that you see.
• Cross out any “be” verbs and any cases of first
or second person pronouns (quotes excluded).
Pass the paper.
• Read the conclusion paragraph.
• Check for the following items:
– Rephrase thesis/ quotation
– Summarize main points/ topic sentence
– “So what?” question/ broad, universal statement
Same person.
• Read the conclusion paragraph.
• Check for rhetorical devices:
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Parallel structure
Antithesis
Anaphora
Epistrophe
Dash
• If you see it, check that it’s used effectively and correctly.
• If you don’t, tell them a good place to add it in.
Pass the paper.
• Smooth it out!
• Check for any choppy or disorganized ideas.
Similar ideas should go together.
• If you see any “jumps” among ideas, or any
sentences that do NOT flow, tell them to “add
transition” where needed.
Pass the paper.
• Final editing check.
• Read through the essay and CIRCLE/ CORRECT
any grammar issues, especially with:
– Word usage
– Subject/ verb agreement
– Pronoun/ antecedent agreement
– Sentence structure– fragments/ run-ons
– “-ing” verbs– NO NO!
Give the paper back to the
owner.
Due Friday!