Transcript Problems with Comparative Essay

Problems with Comparative
Essay
Belief Systems
Thesis
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Needs to have a time frame.
Needs to address all of your
similarities and differences.
Cannot be more than two sentences.
MUST be your last two sentences of
your paragraph.
Needs to take a stand concerning
sim/diff
Thesis
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If you run out of time, it needs to
minimally be your conclusion.
Rubric points!
Introduction
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Use the cue card
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First sentence MUST define the theme!
Ex: belief systems
Do not put the date in the intro other
than the THESIS
Topic Sentences
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English rules apply!
Grammar!
Tense!
Fluff!
Oh my!
Facts
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Chronological order for the religions->
know which religion goes first.
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Hinduism -> Buddhism
Cannot use vocab words (example:
nirvana) and not define or explain.
Good idea to use word of the day
vocab (sati)
Facts
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Order must make sense for body
paragraphs.
Stop repeating same info.
Is it a similarity OR a difference.
Facts
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You forgot
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Buddhism: way of life, meditation vs.
Hinduism monistic
Buddhists reject Hindu gods
Dalai Lama, Buddhism and monks.
Gandhi – caste system was abolished
1947.
Hindu – sacred texts (you had to do
work)
TO USE EDMODO
Reason for
Similarity/Difference
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Explicitly state: THE REASON FOR
THIS SIMILARITY (DIFFERENCE) IS
DO NOT SAY: Hinduism and
Buddhism believe in different beliefs
and that’s why they are different.
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DO SAY (examples): different founders,
different sacred text, origin, impact of
Confucianism, impact of Buddhist
missionaries, Silk Road
Conclusion
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Introduction steps backwards
reworded.
General Problems
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Include dates. (ex: Neolithic
Revolution)
Be specific with your facts.
Assumed reader knew about the
religions.
Do not write as though you are
speaking!
General Problems
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Cannot use “you” “we” etc.
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WE WERE NOT THERE!
No abbreviations.
Need to make the order logical for the
reader.
patriarchal, capitalizations
THREE BODY PARAGRAPHS
ON THE OTHER HAND…HOW MANY HANDS
DID YOU GROW SINCE THE LAST ESSAY?
Less is more
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Less fluff.
More quality facts, analysis and
discussion.
Tense
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You need to be aware of this!
Balance
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Cannot write too much when you set
the stage.
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If you didn’t finish!
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EXAM IS TIMED!
YOU WERE ALLOWED TO BRING IN
THE MAJORITY OF THE ESSAY!
All content must tie back to the original
theme of the essay.
Do not fact dump!
Do not repeat information (TIME)
Beware of BOLD Statements
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Do not say things like NEVER or
EVER if you do not have the ability to
prove it!
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Example: Hinduism never changed and
Buddhism changed as it traveled to
China.
Cannot include bias of your own.
Example: The caste system was
terrible.
Silly Side Notes
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NO ETC.
Number your pages.
Put your name on every page on at
least one side.
Be neat!
Skip lines.
Indent for paragraphs.
Staple in the correct order.
USE THE TOOLS YOU ARE GIVEN!
Questions during a test
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I typically do not answer them.
AP EXAM, I am not allowed within 5ft
of the room.