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November 12, 2014
Freshman Composition
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Pass out Graded Essays – Comparison /Contrast
Go over Strengths and Weaknesses of Essays
Complete Death with Dignity Partner Activity
Discuss Topics Selected for Argument Essays
Peer Review: Argument Essay
What to Expect Today
Date
Assignments
November 12
Rough Draft Argument Essay with Peer Review
Quiz – 75 Readings
November 19
No Class
Email electronic copy of Final Draft of Argument Essay
to Instructor by November 19 – no exceptions
Late 10% per day late
November 26
No Class
Work on Outline of Presentation of Argument
Readings as assigned
December 3
Draft of Script and Visuals for Presentation of Argument
Final Quiz – 75 Readings
December 10
Final ExamPresentations with Visuals Based on Argument Essay
What to Expect For The
Remainder of Course
Universal
Walt Disney
Compare/Contrast Topics
Living On and Off Campus
Compare/Contrast Topics
Face-to-Face (Traditional)
Erwin “The Desert Fox” Rommel
Online Courses
Bernard Montgomery
Compare/Contrast Topics
New York City
Los Angeles
Thomas Jefferson vs.
Abraham Lincoln
Compare/Contrast Topics
Islam versus Judaism
Chick-Fil-A versus McDonalds
Comparison/Contrast Topics
Comparison/Contrast Topics
• The Two Ks I Couldn’t Live Without
• Going Classic in New York City and Surfing Sunny
Side Up in Los Angeles
• A Magical Indecision
• The Fault in Your Movie
• Two Decisions of Learning
• Chicken or Beef?
Interesting Titles
• When someone is shooting at you, you always
assume the shooter is the bad guy. Although you
have your differences, however, you may be more
alike than you think.
• As an upcoming college student, we all wonder how
our college experience will be. The type of
experience we will have depends on whether will
chose to live on campus or live off campus.
• Laughter is the best medicine. What better way is
there to take your medicine than with your best
friends?
Openings Which Catch
Our Attention
• Did you ever wonder how fantastic it would be to
see yourself in more than one place at a time? Just
imagine yourself living a double life between two
amazing cities that have the same values, but still
are very different from one another.
• Have you ever had to choose between two amazing
places and struggled to make a decision between
the two?
Openings Which Catch
Our Attention
• In the world of book adaptations, there are few instances
when movies can truly compare to their fictional
counterparts.
Openings which Capture
Our Attention
• When I was in ninth grade, going into the second
semester of high school, I ended up doing badly in
English I and failing the second semester. That’s
where it all started. I lost my entire grade summer
because of an online class.
• The world of soccer is a gigantic global world
passion. Today, it is common to hear all soccer fans
have the same conversation about who is the best
player in the world, Lionel Messi or Cristiano
Ronaldo.
Openings which Capture
Our Attention
• As technology evolves, we as humans seem to be more
attached to it every day. For some it means progression,
and for others it encumbers them. Some universities
around the world give students the choice to take
traditional classes or online classes.
• Every year, high school seniors are stressed out over the
decision of whether or not to attend college or not. Once a
senior decides to go to college, the choice has to be made
between living on or off campus.
Openings which Capture
Our Attention
• Nike and Adidas are two of the most popular sports
equipment companies in the world.
• Have you ever asked what separates two seemingly
disparate religious beliefs? At the heart of the Middle
East two religious beliefs and cultures at odds with each
other. On one side we have Israel and Judaism and other
the other we have Islam and various Arab countries.
• One can find a fast food restaurant at any corner or in any
mall. Two of the most famous restaurants are McDonalds
and Chick Fil-A
Openings Which Capture
Our Attention
• Everyone loves theme parks right? They have rides,
attractions, and they take you to a world that is care free.
Lucky enough for me there are two of the nation’s well
known theme parks in my back yard: Universal Studios
and Walt Disney World.
• In today’s society we can choose to take online classes or
pursue our education through the more traditional
medium in an on-site classroom setting. The two differ in
many ways, but the goals of the two are the same.
Openings Which Capture
Our Attention
• Although traditional and online classes focus on teaching
a student the same curriculum and objectives, the differ
in the type of experience and impact they have on the
learner.
• Even though Chick Fil-A and McDonalds both serve fast
food and have similar target audiences, these
restaurants differ in number of sales, basis of operation,
and mission statements.
• The book and movie versions of The Fault of Our Stars
are similar in presenting the main characters fall in love
and grow stronger together. They differ in the
presentation of specific details and the absence of minor
characters from the movie.
Strong Thesis Statements
• While Thomas Jefferson and Abraham Lincoln are both
ranked among the top most effective Presidents of all
time, they differed in philosophy, preparation for the
position, and party affiliation.
• The most prominent difference between quantum
mechanics and classical physics are the magnitude of
events, and the perplexing and unintuitive events that
occur in one realm but seem to seamlessly disappear in
another. Their similarities, however, are that they both
are the study of matter and energy, and fundamentally
an event in one realm constitutes an event in the other.
Strong Thesis Statements
• Even though Erwin Rommel and Bernard
Montgomery were two different people fighting for
two different countries for two different causes, they
were more alike than one might think.
• As similar as they sound, there are gigantic
differences between these two friends.
• Another difference between these two friends is
hobbies.
• The first difference between these two American
Presidents is philosophy.
Effective Transitions
• Although these two ways of taking classes differ, the
end result of both is that you will get knowledge and
tools that will be useful in the future.
• Even though these two companies have both owned
the rights to Marvel comics, they have gone two
different directions with the types of movies they’ve
made.
Effective Transitions
• Lack of citations in the text of the paper.
• Sources are listed on Works Cited Page but not cited
in the paper.
• Lesson Learned: Make sure to not only document
sources on the Works Cited Page but within the paper.
Global Issue 1: Lack of Citations
• Lack of Depth of Research
• Using only one source
• Using only sources from company websites
Lesson Learned:
• Perform in-depth research from a variety of sources.
• Find current research (for example, if you are comparing
sales of two restaurants, find data that is 6 months old – not 3
years old)
• Look for specific facts, statistics, expert comments.
Global Issues: Lack of Depth of
Research
When there is no author, use the name of the
organization or publisher in signal phrase.
Erwin Rommel. Jewish Virtual Library. Web. 29
October 2014.
Issue – in-text citation
According to JewishVirtualLibrary.org, during World
War I, Rommel won the Iron Cross Second Class for
his bravery when he was injured in the leg after
running about of ammunition and attacking three
French soldiers.
Erwin Rommel. Jewish Virtual Library. Web. 29
October 2014.
Instead of…
TRY THIS
During World War I, Rommel won the Iron Cross Second Class
for his bravery when he was injured in the leg after running
about of ammunition and attacking three French soldiers
(“Erwin Rommel”).
OR
According to an article on Erwin Rommel published by Jewish
Virtual Library, Rommel won the Iron Cross Second Class for
his bravery when he was injured in the leg after running about
of ammunition and attacking three French soldiers
Erwin Rommel. Jewish Virtual Library. Web. 29
October 2014.
Fixes
According to a survey by the College Board, the
average per meal price with a college meal plan is
anywhere from $7-$11. (Need Title of Article)
“Ditch Your College meal Plan to Save Money.”
Money for College Project. 14 Nov. 2011. Web. 4
Nov. 2014.
Issue 1 – in-text citation
According to a survey by the College Board, the average
per meal price with a college meal plan is anywhere from
$7-$11 (“Ditch Your College Meal Plan to Save Money.”
“Ditch Your College Meal Plan to Save Money.”
Money for College Project. 14 Nov. 2011. Web. 4
Nov. 2014.
Issue 1– in-text citation (Fix)
INSTEAD OF 2011 – USE 2014
“Ditch Your College Meal Plan to Save Money.”
Money for College Project. 14 Nov. 2011. Web. 4
Nov. 2014.
“What’s the Price Tag for College.” College Data. 23
Aug. 2014. Web. 4 Nov. 2014. (Data for Meals for
2013-2014)
Issue 2– Find Current Research
Ways to Make Your
Argument More Powerful
• Ethos: the source's credibility, the speaker's/author's
authority
• Logos: the logic used to support a claim (induction and
deduction); can also be the facts and statistics used to
help support the argument.
• Pathos: the emotional or motivational appeals; vivid
language, emotional language and numerous sensory
details.
What is?
ETHOS, PATHOS, and LOGOS
Ethos
Ethos
• Pathos: Emotion
• To make the audience feel something about what is
presented to it
• Children, animals, illness, memories, etc…
• “Tugs at your heart strings”
Pathos
Pathos
Pathos
• Logos: Logic
• To make the audience think about what is
presented to it
• Statistics, facts, authorities, etc…
• Very straightforward, and not “fluff”. It has a very
scientific, factual approach.
Logos
Logos
Logos
• 1: Michelin Tires
• Little Baby
• Message: Don't skimp on
the important stuff, we
need good tires our
families depend on it.
• Pathos (little babies are
cute and we want them to
live)
FOR EXAMPLE: Ad Analysis
• Partner Activity: Pros and Cons of Death with
Dignity Issue
• Pass out Assignment Sheet and Resources
Before we do this activity, let’s look at how authors have used
ethos, pathos, logos in arguments on this issue.
Partner Activity
• In 2012, the most recent year for which we have an annual statistical
report, terminally ill patients who died after ingesting medication under
the Act accounted for 0.2 percent of all deaths in Oregon. The top
three concerns patients expressed to their attending physicians when
requesting medication under the Act reflect the patients’ desire to
maintain control over their final days. Of the end-of-life concerns
expressed, the least common was “financial implications of
treatment.”
• Reviewing 15 years of data in the aggregate, 1,050 terminally ill
patients have received prescriptions, and 673 of these patients have
ingested the prescribed medications to hasten their deaths, while 377
chose not to. Over 15 years, only 2 percent of the people who used
the law did not have insurance coverage. In 2012, excluding those
few for which insurance status was unknown, all of the participants
were covered by some form of insurance.
Ethos, Logos, Pathos?
• In 2012, the most recent year for which we have an annual statistical
report, terminally ill patients who died after ingesting medication under
the Act accounted for 0.2 percent of all deaths in Oregon. The top
three concerns patients expressed to their attending physicians when
requesting medication under the Act reflect the patients’ desire to
maintain control over their final days. Of the end-of-life concerns
expressed, the least common was “financial implications of
treatment.”
• Reviewing 15 years of data in the aggregate, 1,050 terminally ill
patients have received prescriptions, and 673 of these patients have
ingested the prescribed medications to hasten their deaths, while 377
chose not to. Over 15 years, only 2 percent of the people who used
the law did not have insurance coverage. In 2012, excluding those
few for which insurance status was unknown, all of the participants
were covered by some form of insurance.
Logos – Appeal to Logic
https://storify.com/KarenJanssen/death-withdignity
Logos, Pathos, Ethos?
Pathos:
• use of horrific pictures of terminally ill
patients, these pictures appeal to pathos
because this video makes those people
look helpless and miserable, which isn't
a life that anybody would want to live.
• bolds some words in its statements such
as; pain, unbearable suffering, anguish,
and no hope. All of those words are very
depressing and hopeless.
Pathos
74% of those respondents who
claimed to belong to a religion
agreed that doctors should be
allowed to provide a lethal dose
to a patient experiencing
unbelievable suffering with no
hope of recovery.
Logos
• Along with pathos this Ad appeals to the
use of logos when it says "we can
choose so many of our life experiences,
but it seems we can have no say in
whether we die in pain or at peace."
74% of those respondents who • This statement appeals to logos
because something as huge and
claimed to belong to a religion
personal as death seems most logical
agreed that doctors should be
for us as American citizens to have the
allowed to provide a lethal dose
right to choose how we want to end our
to a patient experiencing
life but it doesn't seem to be so simple.
unbelievable suffering with no
hope of recovery.
Logos
Logos, Ethos, Pathos?
Pathos
Appeals to pathos because viewers get to
first handedly see the struggles and pain
that Brittany has had to go through to
ensure that she wouldn't have to die a
painful and an uncontrollable death. By
getting to see and hear what Brittany has
had to go through the audience of people
watching this video feel pain and sorrow in
the situation
The Vatican also felt
obligated to sternly
lecture everyone about
Maynard’s self-directed
death, calling it “an
absurdity” and
“reprehensible.”
Monsignor Ignacio
Carrasco de Paula,
“Suicide is not a good
thing. It is a bad thing
because it is saying no to
life and to everything it
means with respect to our
mission in the world and
toward those around us.”
Logos
• Partner Activity: Pros and Cons of Death with
Dignity Issue
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Review attached articles
List pros and cons of the issue
Take a position and create a thesis statement
Document your sources in table
Complete and turn in your partner activity sheet
Partner Activity
• Partner Activity: Pros and Cons of Death with
Dignity Issue
Works Cited Page – Let’s Do These Together
Partner Activity
Title of Article: See Which States Allow Assisted Suicide
Author: Emily Barone
Publisher: Time Magazine
Date of Publication: November 3, 2014
Medium: Web
Date of Access: November 5, 2014
Source 1
Title of Article: See Which States Allow Assisted Suicide
Author: Emily Barone
Publisher: Time Magazine
Date of Publication: November 3, 2014
Medium: Web
Date of Access: November 5, 2014
Barone, Emily. “See Which States Allow Assisted Suicide.” Time.
3 Nov. 2014. Web. 5 Nov. 2014
Source 1: Works Cited
Title of Article: Death with Dignity Act Pros and Cons
Title of Publication: Asia-Pacific Economics Blog
Date of Publication: March 14, 2014
Date of Access: November 5, 2014
Medium: Web
Source 2
Title of Article: Death with Dignity Act Pros and Cons
Title of Publication: Asia-Pacific Economics Blog
Date of Publication: March 14, 2014
Date of Access: November 5, 2014
Medium: Web
“Death with Dignity Act Pros and Cons.” Asia-Pacific Economics
Blog. 14 March 2014. Web. 5 Nov. 2014
Source 2: Works Cited
Title of Article: Slippery Slope of “Death with Dignity”
Author: Nat Hentoff
Date of Publication 9/29/02
Publisher (Name of Newspaper): Sacramento Bee
Medium: Print
Source 3
Title of Article: Slippery Slope of “Death with Dignity”
Author: Nat Hentoff
Date of Publication 9/29/02
Publisher (Name of Newspaper): Sacramento Bee
Medium: Print
Hentoff, Nat. “Slippery Slope of ‘Death with Dignity.” Sacramento
Bee. 29 Sept. 2002. Print.
Source 3: Works Cited
Title of Article: My Right to Death with Dignity
Author: Brittany Murphy
Date of Publication: November 2, 2014
Publication: Time
Date of Access: November 5, 2014
Medium: Web
Source 4
Title of Article: My Right to Death with Dignity
Author: Brittany Murphy
Date of Publication: November 2, 2014
Publication: Time
Date of Access: November 5, 2014
Medium: Web
Murphy, Brittany. “My Right to Death with Dignity.” Time
2 Nov. 2014. Web. 5 Nov. 2014.
Source 4: Works Cited
Hentoff, Nat. “Slippery Slope of ‘Death with Dignity.” Sacramento
Bee. 29 Sept. 2002. Print.
According to Nat Hentoff, if a patient desired to end his or her life, two
doctors would first have to conclude that the patient had less than six
months to live (As many doctors will attest this sort of prediction can be
alarmingly imprecise.) The two doctors, by the way, could include
anyone with a medical degree who was licensed in California – a
dermatologist or a plastic surgeon.
OR
If a patient desired to end his or her life, two doctors would first have to
conclude that the patient had less than six months to live (As many
doctors will attest this sort of prediction can be alarmingly imprecise.) The
two doctors, by the way, could include anyone with a medical degree who
was licensed in California – a dermatologist or a plastic surgeon
(Hentoff).
In-Text Citation
“Death with Dignity Act Pros and Cons.” Asia-Pacific Economics
Blog. 14 March 2014. Web. 5 Nov. 2014
In “Death with Dignity Act Pros and Cons,” the author states that one
of the cons of euthanasia is that “family members may take unjustified
disadvantage when mercy killing was legalized through influencing the
decision of the patient into it just for their own gains. In addition, there
will be no way to guarantee whether the decision of assisted suicide is
really voluntary or insisted by others.”
OR
One of the cons of euthanasia is that “family members may take
unjustified disadvantage when mercy killing was legalized through
influencing the decision of the patient into it just for their own gains. In
addition, there will be no way to guarantee whether the decision of
assisted suicide is really voluntary or insisted by others” (“Death with
Dignity Act Pros and Cons”).
In-Text Citation
• What is Your Topic for Argument Essay?
• What is Your Position?
• What strategies have you used so far in your
paper?
• Logos? Ethos? Pathos?
Argument Paper Topics
• Find someone you have not partnered with this
semester. Peer review this classmate’s paper and
have him or her review your paper.
• Use the peer review rubric
Peer Review – Argument
Essay
Date
Assignments
November 12
Rough Draft Argument Essay with Peer Review
Quiz – 75 Readings
November 19
No Class
Email electronic copy of Final Draft of Argument Essay
to Instructor by November 19 – no exceptions
Late 10% per day late
November 26
No Class
Work on Outline of Presentation of Argument –
• Gather Visuals
• Decide format of presentation (Powerpoint? Poster?)
• Begin writing script of what you will say for each
section.
December 3
Draft of Script and Visuals for Presentation of Argument
Final Quiz – 75 Readings
December 10
Final ExamPresentations with Visuals Based on Argument Essay
What’s NEXT