Transcript Correction Exercise

Correction Exercise
STRESS
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: Everyone experiences stress in their lives, I am
no exception.
MAJOR ERROR: Comma splice
MINOR ERROR: Everyone is singular; their is plural.
CORRECTED: All of us experience stress in our lives, and I
am no exception.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: We all need to find the ways to reduce our stress,
otherwise it maybe can result in impaired performance, even
can produce physical or mental illness.
MAJOR ERROR: Two comma splices.
MINOR ERRORS:
1. The word the before ways is incorrect.
2. 可能會 should never be translated as maybe can. In the
present tense, translate it as may or can.
3. The word even comes after helping verbs (助動詞) like can
and don’t.
CORRECTED: We all need to find ways to reduce our stress;
otherwise, it may result in impaired performance and even
produce physical or mental illness.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: Every time when I feel stressful, I will look for ways
to relieve myself.
MINOR ERRORS:
1. The phrase “every time when” is redundant. Change it to
whenever.
2. A thing is stressful; a person feels stressed (Slang: stressed
out).
3. Here, whenever introduces a present tense habit. Don’t
translate 會 as will. Just use the simple present tense.
4. Relieve oneself means to go to the bathroom.
CORRECTED: Whenever I feel stressed, I look for ways to
reduce my stress level.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: Sometimes I will listen music and sing with the
words.
MINOR ERRORS:
1. Listen requires the preposition to.
2. Don’t translate 會 as will if it refers to a present tense
habit. Just use the simple present tense.
CORRECTED:
Sometimes I will listen to music and sing along.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: Singing lets me feel more confident and
relaxing.
MINOR ERRORS:
1. Translate 讓我覺得 as makes me feel.
2. The thing is relaxing. You feel relaxed.
CORRECTED:
Singing makes me feel more confident and relaxed.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: Other times, I will curl up with a good book.
MINOR ERROR:
1. Don’t translate 會 as will if it refers to a present tense
habit.
CORRECTED:
At other times, I curl up with a good book.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: When I reading an excited novel, I could enter a
fictional world and escape from all my troubles.
MAJOR ERROR: The BE verb is needed before reading.
MINOR ERRORS:
1. The novel is exciting.
2. The verb could should be in the present tense.
CORRECTED:
When I am reading an exciting novel, I can enter a fictional
world and escape from all my troubles.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: Escaping for a while can be good way to reduce stress,
only we must not to use it to avoid to face our responsibilities, this
can be unhealthy.
MAJOR ERRORS:
1. Two comma splices.
2. The word only (只要?) is incorrect.
MINOR ERRORS:
1. Way is a singular count noun and needs an article (a).
2. The pronoun it doesn’t have a clear antecedent. What does it
refer to—escaping? The pronoun this also lacks a clear
antecedent.
3. After avoid, use the gerund (VERB-ing).
CORRECTED: Escaping for a while can be a good way to reduce
stress, as long as we are not avoiding our responsibilities; if that
happens, escaping becomes unhealthy.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: One of my other ways to reduce stress is also
unhealthy if use too much: often when I feel under pressures, I
will look for comfort in my favorite snack foods.
MAJOR ERROR: The clause “if use too much” doesn’t have a
subject.
MINOR ERRORS:
1. “under pressures”
2. Don’t translate 會 as will if it refers to a present tense habit.
CORRECTED: One of my other ways to reduce stress is also
unhealthy if I use it too much: often when I feel under
pressures, I look for comfort in my favorite snack foods.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: Obviously, this can lead to overeating, however,
an occasional snack break is sometimes really the best
thing to help us get refresh so we can continue with
important task.
MAJOR ERROR: Comma splice (after overeating)
MINOR ERRORS:
1. refreshed
2. important tasks
CORRECTED: Obviously, this can lead to overeating;
however, an occasional snack break is sometimes really
the best thing to help us get refreshed so we can
continue with important tasks.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: Listen music, read novel, and enjoy delicious snack
are the three things work best to relieve my stress.
MAJOR ERRORS:
1. When verbs are used as the subject, use the gerund form.
2. The adjective clause after work needs a relative pronoun: “the
three things that work best.”
MINOR ERRORS:
1. Listen requires the preposition to.
2. The nouns “novel” and “snack” should be plural.
CORRECTED: Listening to music, reading novels, and enjoying
delicious snacks are the three things that work best to relieve
my stress.
Correction Exercise: STRESS
ORIGINAL: If you are under a lot of stress, I suggest you to
try one of them, they may be just what you need.
MAJOR ERRORS: Comma splice after them
MINOR ERRORS:
1. After the verb suggest, use a that clause.
2. The pronoun them doesn’t have an antecedent.
CORRECTED: If you are under a lot of stress, I suggest that
you try one of my methods for reducing stress. It may
be just what you need.