Transcript but my roommate came in and saw me trying to cook his favorite recipe

Ever feel like you’re not getting anywhere with your
writing???
The Sentence
As much as any sane person
needs to know…
Terms we’ll need
• Subject – tells who or what the
sentence is about.
• Predicate – starts with the verb tells
what the subject is doing.
• Clause (group of words with a subject
and a verb)
(Pacemaker pg 5/6)
Independent-strong, stands alone
Dependent-subordinate-weak, needs support
Simple sentence
A simple sentence has one independent
clause and no dependent clauses:

The student yawned
.( Pacemaker page 30-33)
Although a simple sentence cannot
have a dependent clause, it can have
modifiers:
•The tall student sitting in the back in
my algebra class yawned loudly.
The basic sentence is ‘The student
yawned’. The other words are
modifiers - they are descriptive words.
• A simple sentence contains only one
independent clause, but it can have
more than one subject or verb:
• TWO SUBJECTS: The student and his
friend yawned.
• TWO VERBS : The student yawned
and fell asleep.
• TWO SUBJECTS: The student and his
friend yawned.
• TWO VERBS : The student yawned
and fell asleep.
A sentence with all these elements will be long, but it is
still simple because it contains only one independent
clause:
The tall student sitting in the back in my
physics class and his friend yawned
loudly and fell asleep.
Can you identify the ‘real’ sentence and
the modifiers?
The tall student sitting in the back in
my physics class and his friend
yawned loudly and fell asleep.
Compound sentence
A compound sentence has two or more
independent clauses that are usually joined
by a coordinating conjunction:
• Henry got a new job, so he has to move.
• I have a lot of homework, but I am not going
to have time to study tonight.
Notice the difference between a simple sentence
with a compound verb and a compound sentence
with two clauses:
SIMPLE
My house guests returned from a
long day of shopping and went
straight to bed.
COMPOUND My house guests returned home
from a long day of shopping, and
we decided to stay at home
instead of going out.
What is the difference?
Compound sentence with
coordinating conjunctions
Most compound sentences are formed with a
coordinating conjunction: and, or, but,
so, for, nor, yet. The last three occur
almost exclusively in writing, so they add a
level of formality:
• The experiment was deemed successful,
yet our results were unsatisfactory.
• The students were unhappy with their
professor, for he often wasted their time
in class.
Compound sentence without
coordinating conjunctions
Yet, while most compound sentences are
formed with a coordinating conjunctions,
often good writers decide to eliminate the
conjunction and simply add a semicolon:
• The ambitious student initiated the
research; the teacher was pleased by her
efforts.
• The students were unhappy with their
professor; he often wasted their time in
class.
Compound sentence without
coordinating conjunctions
When a transition leads a clause, it is usually
followed by a comma. If the transition lands
in the middle of a compound sentence, use
the semicolon, and then follow the transition
with a comma:
• The experiment was deemed successful;
unfortunately, our results were unsatisfactory.
• The students were unhappy with their
professor; undeniably, he often wasted their
time in class.
Complex sentence
A complex sentence has an independent
clause with one or more dependent
clauses
A dependent clause cannot stand alone as a
complete sentence
• Since we got to the concert late, we had to
make our way to our seats in the dark.
• We left class early so that we could attend
a special lecture.
Note that introductory dependent clauses must be
followed by commas:
Complex sentences should be
punctuated in one of two ways:
 INDEPENDENT CLAUSE dependent clause (no
comma)
We left class early so that we could attend a
special lecture.
Dependent clause, INDEPENDENT CLAUSE (comma)
So that we could attend a special lecture, we
left class early.
Comparing compound and
complex sentences
• interest, variety, and coherence
• compound sentences differ from
complex sentences in one important
way: In a compound sentence, both
clauses have equal importance; in a
complex sentence, the independent
clause is more important.
Compare these sentences
• COMPOUND John was tired, but he
finished his homework.
• COMPLEX Although John was tired, he
finished his homework.
• In the first sentence, the writer is
communicating that both clauses are
equally important. In the second sentence,
the writer is saying that the subordinate
clause ("John was tired") is less important
than the independent clause ("he finished
his homework").
Long, rambling sentences
Writing that has too many strings of
independent clauses joined by coordinating
conjunctions can be tiresome and
frustrating for the reader.
These long rambling sentences leave the
reader out of breath and wondering which
information is important.
Long rambling sentences are also perceived
as informal because they duplicate
spoken language
Look at this paragraph with many independent
clauses joined with coordinating conjunctions:
I went home, but my roommate wasn't there,
so I started to cook dinner, but my roommate
came in and saw me trying to cook his favorite
recipe, but I didn't really know how to make it
well, and he got really angry, so I stopped
cooking, and he made dinner for us, and then
everything was all right.
The independent clauses are underlined, and the
coordinating conjunctions are in bold:
1 went home, but my roommate wasn't there,
so I started to cook dinner, but my roommate
came in and saw me trying to cook his favorite
recipe, but I didn't really know how to make it
well, and he got really angry, so I stopped
cooking, and he made dinner for us, and then
everything was all right.
This is better! Notice how it makes use of a variety
of sentence structures.
When I went home, my roommate wasn't
there, so I started to cook dinner. Then, my
roommate came in and saw me trying to cook
his favorite recipe even though I didn't know
how to make it well. I stopped cooking
because he got really angry. In the end, he
made dinner for us, and everything was all
right.
Sometimes you can improve things by
just adding a few interesting phrases!
“I thought of this poem while I was
watching my dog play.”
Not a TERRIBLE sentence, really, but not
a very interesting one, either.
Sometimes you can improve things by
just adding a few interesting phrases!
“I thought of this poem while I was watching
my dog play.”
By creating an introductory participial phrase,
we improve things dramatically:
“Watching my dog play, I thought of a great
idea for a poem.”
Sometimes you can improve things by
just adding a few interesting phrases!
“I wrote this poem after I finished a
challenging basketball game.”
By creating an introductory participial phrase,
we improve things dramatically:
“Finishing a challenging basketball game, I
paused to write this poem.”
Sometimes you can improve things by
just adding a few interesting phrases!
“My mom wrote this poem for me. It’s about
childhood.”
What would you do to improve this?
Sometimes you can improve things by
just adding a few interesting phrases!
“My friend, Sabrina, wrote this poem for me.
She told me that her cat inspired her to write
it.”
What would you do to improve this?
Any Questions?
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