Transcript Writing with voice

Writing
with
voice
Introduction from Houghton Mifflin Text p.273
What is Voice?
You’re the star of your writing, so make it
sound like you! When you write with
voice, your audience can hear what
you’re like and how you feel.
Writing without voice sounds boring and
flat, like a robot talking.
Compare these examples.
#1:
Penny was an easy horse to ride. She did
whatever I wanted. I liked riding her.
#2:
Penny seemed like part of me. She moved
as I moved. Her thoughts were mine. We
moved like dancers or ice skaters, together.
Which example has weak voice?
Which has strong voice?
Why does the weak voice sound flat?
Which words in the second example
show the writer’s feelings?
Compare these examples.
#1:
I like to go fishing. I catch many fish. Some of the
fish I throw back. Some of the fish we eat for dinner.
#2:
Have you ever gone fishing? It is so much fun! The
sun sparkles on the water as I catch lots of bluefish
and flounder. I throw back the fish that are smaller
than my hand, but we fry the big ones for dinner.
Which example has weak voice? Which has
strong voice?
Why does the weak voice sound dull and flat?
Which words in the second example show the
writer’s personality?