Transcript Writing Lesson Example

Joan Gardner, Cara Jacobsen, and April Weiss
Commas
The correct use of commas helps you
communicate effectively.
In some places, commas are required to
accurately convey your meaning….
 Commas should be used to prevent confusion.
 Ex. Stop clubbing baby seals! vs. Stop clubbing, baby
seals!
 Commas separate introductory words, phrases,
and clauses from the rest of the sentence.
 Ex. Slowly, the baby seals realized they were in
danger.
 Commas separate clauses in compound sentences.
 Ex. The club was brought out, and the baby seals
grew quiet.
 Commas separate items in a list.
 Ex. All the baby seals—Rupert, Donald, Gertrude,
and Jermaine—gave a tiny roar.
 Commas can be used with dates, addresses, titles,
and numbers.
 Ex. On May 19, 2525, mercury levels will rise and
create a race of super baby seals.
 Commas should be used with most quotations.
 Ex. “Please stop clubbing me,” said the super baby
seal.
 Don’t use commas excessively!
 Ex. The evil captor, kept clubbing the, super baby seal,
and the super, baby, seal, attacked the man, leading an
attack.
 Commas separate parenthetical and transitional
expressions.
 Ex. Some seals, incidentally, continued to revolt
against their aggressive captors.
Comma Splices and Fused Sentences
Commas can be used to structure sentences and indicate
natural pauses.
Without them, you could sound like this:
www.youtube.com/watch?v=TzbUPfoveok
In order to avoid sounding like this, revise comma
splices and fused sentences.
Use something more than a single comma to
separate two independent clauses.
Ex. The Micro Machines Man was popular in the 80’s,
Cara is the only one who recognizes him now.
What’s the correct way to fix this?
A. The Micro Machines Man was popular in the 80’s.
Cara is the only one who recognizes him now.
B. The Micro Machines Man was popular in the 80’s, but
Cara is the only one who recognizes him now.
C. The Micro Machines Man was popular in the 80’s;
Cara is the only one who recognizes him now.
D. Although the Micro Machines Man was popular in the
80’s, Cara is the only one who recognizes him now.
Use commas to fix run-on (fused) sentences
Ex. Micro Machines were so amazing because they were so
small so incredible and so durable.
Fixed: Micro Machines were so amazing because they were
so small, so incredible, and so durable.
Sentence Fragments
Sentence fragments are like comma splices, but with
periods instead of commas.
www.youtube.com/watch?v=gx6TBrfCW54
 Phrase fragments are dependent clauses used alone.
 Ex. I have issues. With badgers.
 Be careful not to make a fragment when starting with
transitions.
 Ex. Badgers have attacked many creatures. Such as
cobras.
 Compound-predicate fragments unnecessarily
separate objects from their subjects.
 Ex. The badger attacked the cobra. And dragged it into its
hole.
 Dependent-clause fragments are also dependent
clauses used alone.
 Ex. The badger attacked the cobra. And was bitten.
To fix sentence fragments, combine clauses with commas or
conjunctions.
Fixed examples:
 I have issues with badgers.
 Badgers have attacked many creatures, such as cobras.
 The badger attacked the cobra and dragged it into its hole.
 The badger attacked the cobra and was bitten.
No baby seals were harmed in
the making of this PowerPoint
presentation.
Unfortunately, one cobra was
mauled.
Sources
 Lundsford, Andrea. The Everyday Writer. Boston: Bedford/St. Martin’s,
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2010. 311-335.
Turner Entertainment Company. “Stop clubbing, baby seals…”
http://othersiderainbow.blogspot.com/2012/02/stop-clubbing-babyseals.html. 11 Feb. 2012. Web. 2 March 2013.
Williston, Chris. “Micro (Machine) Spirituality.”
http://www.austincnm.com/index.php/2011/08/micro-machinespirituality/#.UTLmOVflrbA. 22 Aug. 2011. Web. 2 March 2013.
“Honey badger.” http://thelife-animal.blogspot.com/2012/07/honeybadger.html. Web. 2 March 2013.
“We Don’t Need No Stinking Badgers!”
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gx6TBrfCW54. 23 March 2009.
Web. 2 March 2013.
“More MicroMachines.”
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TzbUPfoveok. 1 Oct. 2007. Web. 2
March 2013.