Transcript Dogs paper 2-year 8 comparison SOL - School

Writers’ viewpoints and
perspectives for Paper 2
Year 8
Paper 2 Assessment Objectives: Section A
Assessment
Objective
What it wants you to be able to do
Simplified
A01
•
What do I
Q1: Identify
understand the text Q2: Select and
to mean?
synthesise
•
Identify and interpret explict and implicit
information and ideas
Select and synthesise evidence from
different texts.
Question on Paper 2 that
assesses this objective
A02
Comment on, explain and analyse how
writers use language and structure to achieve
effects and influence readers, using relevant
subject terminology to support their views.
How has the writer
used language to
make me respond
in a certain way?
Q3
A03
Compare writers’ ideas and
perspectives, as well as how these are
conveyed across two or more texts.
Why has a writer
written in a certain
way? What
methods have they
used?
Q4
A04
Evaluate texts critically and support
this with appropriate textual
references.
What is my opinion
of a writer’s
writing? Why do I
think this?
Only on Paper 1.
Phew!
Paper 2 Assessment objectives Section B
Assessment
objective
What it wants you to do
Simplified
Question you will find
this assessed on in Paper
2
A05
24 marks
•
Communicate clearly, effectively
and imaginatively, selecting and
adapting tone, style and register
for different forms, purposes
and audiences.
Organise information and ideas,
using structural and grammatical
features to support coherence
and cohesion of texts.
•
Writing needs to be
clear and interesting.
It should fit the task!
5
•
Writing needs to
make sense across
the whole text. Use
paragraphs and topic
sentences, beginning
and endings to do
this.
Use a range of vocabulary and
sentence structures for clarity,
purpose and effect, with
accurate spelling and
punctuation.
• Your writing
needs to be
accurate and
varied.
•
A06
16 marks
•
5
Question
What is required
Marks
available /
80
Weighting
as a % of
whole GCSE
Suggested timing
Q1
4 true statements
shade the boxes
4
2.5%
Read only the section of
the source specified in
the question
5 minutes
Q2
2 -3 comparative
paragraphs
INFERENCE
8
5%
Read both sources in full
Q3
4-6 (Stretch group)
developed paragraphs
METHODS
12
7.5%
Re-read and annotate the
section of the source
specified in the question
Intro
2-3 comparative
paragraphs
Conclusion
METHODS
16
7 paragraphs
500 words
2 sides of A4
All suggestions are
approximate!
40 (24+16)
Q4
Q5
Writing to
present a point
of view
15 minutes
15 minutes
10%
Re-read the two sources
and plan answer
5 minutes +
20 minutes
= 25 minutes
25%
(5 minutes planning / 35
minutes writing/ 5
minutes editing)
45 minutes
Assessment objectives
• AO1: Identify and interpret explicit and implicit
information and ideas. Select and synthesise from
different texts.
• AO2: Explain, comment on and analyse how
writers use language and structure to achieve
effects and influence readers, using relevant
subject terminology to support their views.
• AO3: Compare writers’ ideas and perspectives
and how they are conveyed.
• AO4: Evaluate texts critically and support this
with appropriate textual references.
• Texts on this paper will be drawn from nonfiction and literary non-fiction published in the
19th, 20th and 21st centuries.
Writers’ viewpoints and perspectives
• Source A: 21st Century non-fiction: a
newspaper article called Forget 101
Dalmatians, 16 are driving me dotty! by David
Leafe
• Source B: 19th Century literary non-fiction:
an extract called Carriage Dogs by Edward
Jesse
Source A
Forget 101 Dalmatians, 16
are driving me dotty! The average
number of puppies born to Dalmatians is eight. David Leafe
has been sent to report on a dog called Milly, who has given
birth to a litter of sixteen.
As the July sun sets over a Shropshire farm,
sheep graze quietly in the fields, horses doze
contentedly in their stables, and hawks circle
majestically in the skies above. This rural scene
is like something out of a painting, but
suddenly it erupts into chaos. Around the
corner of a barn appear 16 frisky Dalmatian
puppies, tumbling and scampering in every
direction as they are pursued by their owner,
21-year-old Becky Elvins.
As quickly as she can scoop them up and place
them in their large wicker basket, they spill out
again, darting between her legs, nipping at her
wellingtons and endlessly disappearing and
reappearing in a polka-dot whirl. I feel
exhausted just watching the bedtime bedlam
(1) which has been part of Becky's routine for
the past seven weeks.
As a trainee teacher, she spends her day
handling classes of primary school children but that's nothing compared to looking after
this brood, born to her much-loved Dalmatian
Milly at the end of May.
Two years ago, when it was time for Milly to
become a mother, Becky set about the
business of canine love-matching via the
internet. This eventually led her to Coventry,
the home of a spotty suitor (2 )named Dexter.
Then, when Milly failed to go into labour two
days after her due date, the vet decided to
perform a caesarean.(3 )
'He started lifting the puppies out and
eventually got to eight,' says Becky. 'We
thought that was it but then he said: “I'll start
on the other half now.” We couldn't believe it.
It wasn't long before they were running all
over the place, tipping over boxes of cotton
wool and almost sliding off the table on to the
floor.'
Back home, the family made space for Milly
and the puppies in their conservatory, with
Becky sleeping on the sofa beside their basket,
unwilling to leave them for even a minute.
When the puppies are ready to be taken away
next week, there will no doubt be tears for
Becky and her family. 'The first one to go and
the last are usually the most emotional,' says
Becky. 'But you know they are going to the
next stage in their lives and that they will be
loved.'
As for Milly - and all the family - they will be
having a very well-earned rest. 'When you
watch the Disney cartoon, you have to wonder
if anyone could ever cope with that many dogs
in real life. We've loved having the puppies,
but it's been hard enough looking after 16 of
them - let alone 101!'
Source B:
Carriage Dogs In the 19th century,
Dalmatians were known as carriage dogs.
They used to run alongside stagecoaches
to protect the horses because they were
thought to have a calming effect on
them. In this text by Edward Jesse, the
bond between Dalmatians and horses is
clearly shown.
The Dalmatian is handsome in shape,
something between the British foxhound and
English pointer;(1) his head more delicate than
that of the latter, and something longer: his
general colour white, and his whole body and
legs covered with small irregular-sized black or
reddish-brown spots. The pure breed has
tanned cheeks and black ears. A singular
opinion prevailed at one time in this country
that this beautiful dog was made more
handsome by having his ears cropped: this
barbarous fancy (2) is now fast dying away.
The late Mr. Thomas Walker, of Manchester,
had a small Dalmatian dog, which was
accustomed to be in the stable with two of his
carriage-horses, and to lie in a stall with one of
them, to which he was particularly attached.
The servant who took care of the horses was
ordered to go to Stockport (3 )(which is distant
about seven miles), upon one of the horses,
and took the one above mentioned (the
favourite of the dog), with him, and left the
other with the dog in the stable; being
apprehensive in case the dog, which was much
valued by his master, should be lost upon the
road.
After the man and horse had been gone about
an hour, some person coming accidentally into
the stable, the dog took the opportunity of
quitting his imprisonment, and immediately
set off in search of his horse companion. The
man, who had finished the business he was
sent upon, was just leaving Stockport, when he
was surprised to meet the dog he had left in
the stable, coming with great speed down the
hill into the town, and seemed greatly rejoiced
to meet with his friendly companion, whom he
had followed so far by scent.
The friendship between these animals was
mutual; for the servant, going one day to
water the carriage-horses at a large stone
trough,(4) which was then at one end of the
marketplace, the dog as usual accompanying
them, was attacked by a large mastiff (5,) and
in danger of being much worried(6), when the
horse (his friend), which was led by the servant
with a halter(7), suddenly broke loose from
him, and went to the place where the dogs
were fighting, and with a kick of one of his
heels struck the mastiff from the other dog
clean into a cellar opposite; and having thus
rescued his companion, returned quietly with
him to drink at the trough.
Glossary:
1 Foxhound, pointer – different breeds of dog.
2 Barbarous fancy – a cruel procedure.
3 Stockport – a town in Greater Manchester.
4 Trough – stone drinking troughs were
provided along many roads for animals to drink
from.
5 Mastiff – a large dog known for its size and
strength.
6 Much worried – badly injured.
7Halter – a head collar used for leading horses.
Section A: Reading
Answer all questions in this section.
You are advised to spend about 45 minutes on this section.
•
•
Read again source A from lines 1 to 12.
Choose four statements below which are TRUE.
• Choose a maximum of four statements.
a.
The countryside where Becky lives is normally quiet.
b.
The puppies are 16 weeks old.
c.
The puppies run between Becky’s legs and bite her wellingtons.
d.
Becky is a trainee teacher in a secondary school.
e.
The puppies live on a farm in Hampshire.
f.
Milly is the much-loved mother of the puppies.
g.
The puppies were born in July.
h.
The puppies cause chaos on the farm.
[4 marks]
Section A: Reading
Answer all questions in this section.
You are advised to spend about 45 minutes on this section.
•
•
Read again source A from lines 1 to 12.
Choose four statements below which are TRUE.
• Choose a maximum of four statements.
• a.
• The countryside where Becky lives is normally quiet.
• b.
• The puppies are 16 weeks old.
• c.
• The puppies run between Becky’s legs and bite her wellingtons.
• d.
• Becky is a trainee teacher in a secondary school.
• e.
• The puppies live on a farm in Hampshire.
• f.
• Milly is the much-loved mother of the puppies.
• g.
• The puppies were born in July.
• h.
• The puppies cause chaos on the farm.
[4 marks]
Question 2
• You need to refer to source A and source B for
this question.
• Use details from both sources. Write a
summary of the different ways Milly’s vet and
Mr Walker’s servant look after the dogs.
[8 marks]
12 minutes 2-3 paragraphs!
2-3 comparative paragraphs
Both…
this is similar…
Likewise…
this is similar
However…
Point of
similarity
or
difference
1
2
3
4
Dotty dalmations extract – what it shows and
suggests
Connective
of
comparison
Carriage dogs extract – what it shows and
suggests
Both Source A and Source B show that the dogs are cared for.
However in Source A, Milly’s vet “decided to perform a
caesarean” which shows the vet cares for Milly and that
technology allows dogs to be treated equally to women when
giving birth. The fact that the vet “started lifting the puppies
out” shows that he is being very careful with them. The vet says
“I think I’ll start on the other half now” which shows he feels
relaxed and jokey about the situation.
On the other hand, in Source B, the servant
What we might include
• Different attitudes to animals in the 19th and
21st centuries
• The vet takes good care of Milly and jokes
with Becky; the servant also takes care of the
dog but through respect for Mr Walker
• The vet obviously loves animals and the
servant probably does, too, but in a more
distant way
The vet treats Milly as if she’s important, showing her the
same care he would a human being by deciding ‘to perform a
caesarean’. When he delivers eight puppies he makes a joke
and says ‘I’ll start on the other half now’, so he’s keeping the
atmosphere light-hearted and calm for Milly as she gives
birth. People treated animals differently in the 19th century
and Mr Walker’s servant has a more distant attitude to the
‘small Dalmatian dog’. He’s not outwardly affectionate with
it but does deliberately leave it shut in the stable for safety
when he goes to Stockport in case ‘the dog should be lost on
the road’. He may genuinely care for the dog but it’s also
possible he thinks he might lose his job if something bad
happens to it because he knows it is ‘much valued’ by Mr
Walker.
Question 3
• You now need to refer only to source A, lines 3
to 9.
• How does the writer use language to show the
behaviour of the puppies?
• [12 marks]
12 – 15 minutes – 4-6 paragraphs!
Around the corner of a barn appear 16 frisky
Dalmatian puppies, tumbling and scampering in
every direction as they are pursued by their owner,
21-year-old Becky Elvins.
As quickly as she can scoop them up and place
them in their large wicker basket, they spill out
again, darting between her legs, nipping at her
wellingtons and endlessly disappearing and
reappearing in a polka-dot whirl. I feel exhausted
just watching the bedtime bedlam which has been
part of Becky's routine for the past seven weeks.
The writer describes the behaviour of the puppies
as clumsy and chaotic: “bedtime bedlam” creates
a feeling of uncontrollable dogs but the alliteration
makes it sound happy and gives it a jokey tone.
The extensive use of verbs by the writer shows
how energetic and active the dogs are. “tumbling”
suggests they don’t know how to walk yet.
The writer uses language to show how Becky has
to cope with the dogs…
He uses a metaphor…
The adverb…
Leafe uses verbs like ‘tumbling’ and
‘scampering’ to convey the playful nature of
the puppies. There are sixteen of them and
they run around the farm so quickly that they
fall over each other. He also describes how they
behave with their owner, Becky, saying they are
‘darting between her legs’ and ‘nipping at her
wellingtons’. The words ‘darting’ and ‘nipping’
emphasise their excitement, and is typical of
how puppies behave.
Question 4
For this question, you need to refer to the whole of source A, together with
source B, lines 15 to the end.
The writers have shown how Dalmatians form close relationships with others:
Milly with the puppies and Becky, and the small Dalmatian dog with the
horse.
Compare how the two writers convey these relationships.
In your answer, you should:
• compare the different relationships
• compare the methods the writers use to convey the relationships
• support your ideas with quotations from both texts.
[16 marks]
Relationships
Viewpoint /
shown (Leafe) perspective
Methods
Relationships
shown
(Jesses)
Methods
Viewpoint /
perspective
Relationships
shown (Leafe)
The puppies were
born to her “much
loved” dog Milly
Viewpoint /
perspective
Methods
•
verb
•
Back home
the family
“made space
for the
puppies”
“The vet
decided to
perform a
caesarean”
“Becky was
unwilling to
leave them
for even a
minute”
•
•
•
•
Dogs are
part of the
family
Treated
really well
Almost
equal to
humans
Dogs bring
happiness
21st
Century –
animals are
treated
differently
Valuable
Relationships
shown
Methods
Viewpoint /
perspective
verb
•
(Jesses)
verb
The dog
“which was
much
valued”
•
“He was
verb
particularly
attached” (to
the horse)
noun
He rejoiced
to meet his
companion
verb
Adjective
Kicks / struck Verbs
Clean into
Adjective
the cellar
Returned
quietly to drink adverb
at the trough
•
•
Dalmatians
are very loyal
They are
treated
differently in
1800s to
most modern
dogs – they
work
Independent
– less
attached to
humans.
Valuable
Perspective of both writers:
_______ writes about ______ from the perspective of someone ______ whereas
/ similarly ___________ writes about ______ from the perspective of _________
Viewpoint of the writer (Point): In Source A, the writer’s viewpoint about
________ is
Method and Quote (Evidence) : The simile “________”
Explain the effect: suggests ….implies…gives the impression…conveys the
feeling that ____________________
Connective: Similarly …on the other hand…alternatively… in contrast
Viewpoint of the writer (Point): In Source B, the writer’s viewpoint about
________ is
Method and Quote (Evidence) : The use of powerful verbs “________”
Explain the effect: suggests ….implies…gives the impression…conveys the
feeling that ____________________
X 2 or 3
Conclusion: Overall, ___________ views….whereas _______ views
Leafe writes about dogs from the perspective of a modern family who treat
them as equal members. On the other hand, Jesses writes from the
perspective of an 1800s man describing a working dog and its friendship
with a horse.
In Source A, Milly is part of the family. Her puppies
are born to the “much-loved” dog. The verb “loved”
tells us how cherished and cared for she is. In
comparison, in Source B, the dog is described as being
“much valued” by its master. This creates the feeling
that the dog is secure but he is a servant and useful
rather than part of the family.
• the similar closeness of Becky with Milly and the puppies and the
horse with the small Dalmatian dog, despite the obvious different
perspectives of the human/animal vs. animal/animal relationships
• • the actions of both Becky and the horse to protect the dogs and
keep them safe
• • the dependence of the puppies on Becky vs. the mutual
friendship between the horse and the small Dalmatian dog
• And comment on methods such as:
• • implied closeness through Becky’s actions vs. overtly stated
through language like ‘friendship’ and ‘companion’ for the
dog/horse
• • use of emotional tone vs. factual understated tone
• • language differences to reflect different times/modes/purposes
Section B: Writing
You are advised to spend about 45 minutes on this section.
Write in full sentences.
You are reminded of the need to plan your answer.
You should leave enough time to check your work at the end.
‘People become too attached to their pets. Animals are here to
be useful, not to be spoilt.’
Write the text to appear on a website about the treatment of
animals in which you argue your point of view on this statement.
(24 marks for content and organisation 16 marks for technical
accuracy)
[40 marks]
‘People become too attached to their pets. Animals are here to be useful, not to be spoilt.’
Write the text to appear on a website about the treatment of animals in which you argue
your point of view on this statement.
For
Against
Trying to keep an animal in an inappropriate
environment
Not giving the animal the right exercise
Too many pictures of animals online!
Dressing up and pampering animals – when
children are living in poverty.
Dog competitions eg Crufts
Pure bred dogs become disabled
British people are sentimental about dogs
and cats but don’t care enough about farm
animals who are treated very badly.
Animal testing – also tested on pets like
rabbits etc
Pets are a nuisance – faeces, noise, killing
other animals.
Companion for very lonely people
They work to help disabled people
They respond to rewards – that’s how we
domesticate them.
They give us happiness
They help us to be responsible
They show loyalty
Unconditional love