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Warm Up Sentences
Quarter 1 and 2
Bell-Ringers: Sentence Fix Ups
Read the sentence---write a
correction in your notebook.
Be prepared to explain
your revision decisions.
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Complete the assigned
worksheet on your own first
and compare your answers
with your group.
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Warm Up Sentence
swimming desperate
to reach the shore a
light was seen in the
distance
Word Challenge for the Day
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What do the following words have in common?
Assess
Banana
Dresser
Grammar
Potato
Revive
Uneven
Voodoo
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Hint
It is more than having letters repeated in each one...
Hide
Show Hint
Answer
If you take the first letter and move it to the rear of the word, you get the same word when
read backwards.
Hide
Show Answer
Corrected:
Swimming desperately
to reach the shore, Bob
saw a light in the
distance. (active vs.
passive voice)
Warm Up Sentence
put small dry twigs at the
bottom of a fire that
makes it easier to start the
fire said juan ortiz our
counselor
Optical Illusion Challenge
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How many legs does this elephant have?
Corrected:
"Put small, dry twigs at
the bottom of a fire to
make it easier to start,"
said Juan Ortiz, our
counselor. (appositive)
IF YOU HAVE EITHER A
YARDSTICK OR A
MEASURING TAPE SAID
MR DIXON BRING THEM
TOMORROW
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Question
What is so fragile that when you say its name you break it?
Question
Forward I am heavy, backwards I am not. What am I?
Question
What object has keys that open no locks, space but no room, and you can enter but not go in?
Question
I have five letters.
If you take the first and last ones I will still be the same.
Even if you take the middle letter I will be the same as before.
What am I?
http://www.buzzle.com/articles/word-brain-teasers.html
Corrected:
“If you have either a
yardstick or a
measuring tape," said
Mr. Dixon, "bring it
tomorrow."
Other options… “ …” / “ ‘ …’”
Can you believe that Mr. Dixon said, “If you have
a yardstick bring it tomorrow”?
(punctuating the entire sentence---quotation is
inside)
 Sally complained to me, “I can’t believe that Mr.
Dixon said, ‘bring it tomorrow.’”
(Sally is quoting Mr. Dixon—single quotation mark
inside double)
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Tuesday, October 18
Fix this!
before them girls may play said
coach pasternak they hafta meet
the requirements in the manual
Corrected
“Before those girls may
play,” said Coach
Pasternak, “they have to
meet the requirements in
the manual.”
Thursday, October 20th
donna did mr ecklund require
your class to read the short
story flight to freedom bridget
asked
Corrected
"Donna, did Mr. Ecklund require
your class to read the short story
'Flight to Freedom’?" Bridget
asked.
Friday, October 21st
the macaroni and cheese was made by saras
mom for the party, the dish was liked by
every one at the party
Corrected
Sara’s mom made the macaroni
and cheese for the party;
everyone liked the dish.
or
 Everyone at the party liked the
macaroni and cheese dish that
Sara’s mom made.
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run-ons or fused and comma splice
ppt.pps
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Comma splice— two independent clauses
separated by a comma when a semi-colon, period,
or additional coordinating conjunction is needed.
Fused sentence (also known as a “Run on”) two or
more independent clauses in a sentence that are not
separated by any punctuation, but that should be.
Fix This!
a plaque at riverside park bears this
quotation form thoreaus book
walden that man is the richest
whose pleasures are cheapest
Corrected:
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A plaque at Riverside Park bears
this quotation from Thoreau's book
Walden: "That man is the richest
whose pleasures are the cheapest."
Use a Colon :
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After an independent clause that precedes a list.
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The use of these punctuation marks often confuses students: comma, semicolon, colon, hyphen, and dash.
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The Stearns County Theatrical Company announces the opening of the following plays: Lear, May 10th; Death of a Salesman, June 15th; and
Camelot, August 20th.
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There are three historical sources of belief: reason or intellect, custom or habit,and inspiration.
To separate an explanation, rule, or example from a preceding independent clause.
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After a sleepless night, the senator made her decision: she would not seek re-election.
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Music is more than a mechanical arrangement of sounds: it is an expression of deep feeling and ethical values.
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A way to remember which direction to move the hands of the clock when changing to or from Daylight Savings Time: spring forward, fall back.
After the salutation of a business letter.
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Dear Mr. Peterson:
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Dear Faculty Member:
In the heading of a business memo.
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TO:
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SUBJECT:
Between the hour and the minutes.
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5:30 p.m.
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3:00 a.m.
Between the chapter and the verse in the Bible, in citations for some literary works, and between the volume and the number of some publications.
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Genesis 1:18-20
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Part 3:121
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Vol. 2:34
As part of a title.
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Grey Power: A Practical Survival Handbook for Senior Citizens.
In a bibliography between the place of publication and the name of the publisher.
Thursday, October 27
Warm Up Sentence ---Quiz Today!!! Lesson 4
looking for my assignment it was
found that someone sat it under
a pile of house beautiful
magazines
Corrected
Looking for my assignment,
I found that someone had
set it under a pile of
House Beautiful
magazines.
Titles and Punctuation
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Short Stories— “quotation marks”
Poems-- “quotation marks”
Plays —underline or italicize
Movies —underline or italicize
Television Programs —underline or italicize
Episodes on television “quotation marks”
Songs “quotation marks”
CDs/Albums —underline or italicize
Wednesday, November 2nd
camping near lake george we
went fishing in the lake have
taken many hikes and we like to
explore in the area
Verb Tense and Consistency
Went fishing past tense
2.
Have taken many hikes past perfect tense
3.
Like to explore present tense
 Went fishing
 Went hiking
 Went exploring—too many “wents”
Fishing, hiking, exploring
Fished, hiked, explored
Fish, hike, and explore
1.
Corrected:
Camping near Lake George,
we fished, hiked, and
explored the area.
Smiley-face technique? ____________
Quarter 2 Thanksgiving in two weeks
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What are YOU thankful for?
Don’t end in a preposition!
For what are you thankful?
Prepositions: for, in, at, to, of, words that indicate
“position” common prepositions are
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about, above, across, after, against, along, among, around,
at, before, behind, below, beneath, beside, between, beyond,
but, by, despite, down, during, except, for, from, in, inside,
into, like, near, of, off, on, onto, out, outside, over, past, since,
through, throughout, till, to, toward, under, underneath, until,
up, upon, with, within, and without.
Avoid ending with a preposition
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Where are you at?
 Where
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are you?
What suitcase should I use to put my clothes into?
 Into
what suitcase should I put my clothes?
Warm Up Sentence- #15
he hasnt never showed much
self reliance or had growed
much from his experiences
My Growth as a
Writer/Reader/Thinker
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When I was ten, I…
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Now, I…
Corrected:
He has never shown
much self-reliance or
grown much from his
experiences.
The dreaded double negative--
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Incorrect
He can't convince no one to go with him.
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He can convince no one to go with him.
He can't convince anyone to go with him.
Incorrect
I haven't never gone to the circus.
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I have never gone to the circus.
I haven't ever gone to the circus.
Correct These Please
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Once he gets going, there isn't nothing that can stop
him.
Once he gets going, there isn’t anything that can
stop him.
I've tried to go with him, but I can't hardly keep up.
Warm Up Sentence#16—Nov 11/14
somebody must of lent
my brother in laws
ladder it weren't in the
garage
fragment, fused, comma splice, complete
sentence?
Corrected:
Somebody must have borrowed
my brother-in-law's ladder; it
wasn't in the garage.
Was the sentence before an example of comma
splice or fused?
run-ons or fused and comma splice
ppt.pps
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Comma splice— two independent clauses
separated by a comma when a semi-colon, period,
or additional coordinating conjunction is needed.
Fused sentence (also known as a “Run on”) two or
more independent clauses in a sentence that are not
separated by any punctuation, but that should be.
Warm Up Sentence #17 Nov 15/16
our neighbors left us see
pictures of there photo safari
in africa they plan to return
back there soon
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Corrected (wordiness/fused error)
Our neighbors let us see
pictures of their photo
safari in Africa; they plan
to return soon.
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http://www.chompchomp.com/rules/csfsrules.htm
Anne enjoyed her high school reunion she hadn't
seen her old friends in over ten years.
Comma splice? Fragment? Fused? Complete?
Anne enjoyed her high school reunion, she hadn't
seen her old friends in over ten years.
Comma splice? Fragment? Fused? Complete?
Options for CS and Fusion Errors
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He has completed his research, he will not report his
findings to class today. (CS—incorrect)
He has completed his research he will not report his
findings to class today. (FS—incorrect)
He has completed his research, so he will report his findings
to class today.
 He has completed his research, but he will not report his
findings to class today.
 He has completed his research; he will report his findings to
class today.
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(All of these are grammatically correct, but context and
purpose dictate which works best.)
The tricky thing to remember is that comma splices and fused sentences can appear in a
longer string of sentences with other punctuation. me more examples below.
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Comma splice:
To get ready for the party, Sharon baked cookies and brownies until she
thought her oven would explode, finally, she cleaned the kitchen, satisfied
that the goodies would be a hit.
Fused sentence:
To get ready for the party, Sharon baked cookies and brownies until she
thought her oven would explode finally, she cleaned the kitchen, satisfied that
the goodies would be a hit.
Correct grammar:
"To get ready for the party, Sharon baked cookies and brownies until she
thought her oven would explode. Finally, she cleaned the kitchen, satisfied
that the goodies would be a hit."
Warm Up Sentence #18—Nov 17/18
ms ruffalo shouldnt of
left mr logan buy that
computer she is
president of design
international
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Corrected:
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Ms. Ruffalo, president of
Design International,
shouldn't have let Mr. Logan
buy that computer.
What is the term between parentheses?
Happy Thanksgiving! Warm Up
Sentence #19—Nov 21/22
41 pilgrims signed the mayflower
compact which has established a
government in plymouth colony
Corrected
Forty-one pilgrims signed
the Mayflower Compact,
which established a
government in Plymouth
Colony.
Warm Up Sentence #20 11/28/29
pocahontas lived in england
for several years she dies
and was buried in england
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Describe your progress, or lack
thereof, that you have had with your
search for a college, a job, or a
major for the fall of 2012.
Corrected
For several years
Pocahontas lived in
England, where she died
and was buried
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Warm Up Sentence #21
my mother she is the
person who you must ask
for a copy of the book
careers in computers
Is it Who? Or Whom?
RULE. Use the he/him method
to decide which word is
correct.
he = who
him = whom
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Corrected
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My mother is the person whom
you must ask for a copy of the
book Careers in Computers.
Tom is the one I _____ I will meet.
Ask yourself.
Who will you meet?
Will you meet he?
• or will you meet him?
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Him sounds better, so choose WHOM
How to Decide?
WHO
he
she
they
WHOM
him
her
them
(Who or Whom) ____________
Did
him write the letter?
(sounds
Did
wrote the letter?
weird)
he write the letter?
(sounds
ok)
Who wrote the letter? (Correct!)
For who/whom should I vote for
president?
Should I vote for he? (nah….doesn’t sound
right)
Should I vote for him? (yes, sounds like
a plan!)
For whom should I vote for president?
Warm Up Sentence #22
of all my relatives uncle
frank is more noted for his
generosity he gives
everyone the expensivest
gifts at christmastime
Corrected #22
Of all my relatives, Uncle Frank is
most noted for his generosity; he
gives everyone the most
expensive gifts at Christmas
time.
http://english-zone.com/teach/pdffiles/comparatives.pdf
Comparative (comparing)---more (than the other)
 Superlative (assessing as to the best)---most (of all)
 Big
bigger
biggest
 Jolly
jollier
jolliest
 Sweet
sweeter
sweetest
 Expensive
more expensive most expensive
 Delicious more delicious
most delicious
(notice anything about the longer words …???)
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run-ons or fused and comma splice
ppt.pps
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Comma splice— two independent clauses
separated by a comma when a semi-colon, period,
or additional coordinating conjunction is needed.
Fused sentence (also known as a “Run on”) two or
more independent clauses in a sentence that are not
separated by any punctuation, but that should be.
Describe a time in your life that you were face with a
failure or adversity.
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How did you respond at first?
What was the outcome?
How has your outlook on life changed as a result?
Was you proud of how you handled the situation?
Why or why not? What have you learned?
10H—Your Turn to Brag!
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In the tradition of the Anglo-Saxon BOAST
Brag about yourself---Check out writing prompt
#38 in Writing Portfololio
What do WE value now in our culture?
As adults?
As kids?
In high school?
In Ashburn?
38. Your Turn to Brag (10H):
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The brag is a form of exaggerated boasting, reaching back to the
Anglo-Saxon epic Beowulf and flourishing in pioneer days. Read
the following brag from a legendary riverboat pilot:
“I’m half wild horse and half alligator and the rest of me is crooked
snags and red-hot snappin’ turtle. I can hit like lightning and whip
my weight in wildcats. I can outrun, outjump, outshoot, outbrag,
outdrink, and outfight, rough-and-tumble, no holds barred, any man
on both sides of the river from Pittsburgh to New Orleans and back
again. Come on, and see how tough I am!” -- Mike Fink
Journal Assignment
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Write your own brag. Although Mike Fink limits
himself to how tough he is, your abilities will
undoubtedly be more varied. How intelligent,
creative, talented, powerful, rich, important...are
you? Impress me!
Warm Up Sentence #23 (Dec 6/7)
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yes before grandmother
arrives for the Holidays
we finished painting the
West Bedroom
Corrected (Dec 6/7)
Yes, before Grandmother
arrives for the holidays, we
will finish painting the west
bedroom.
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Warm Up Sentence #24 (Dec 7/8)
there is many events that have
changed my life but my life was
changed more by my little
stuffed bunny flopsy
Corrected
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There are many events that
have changed my life, but
Flopsy, my little stuffed
bunny, changed my life the
most.
The Appositive
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An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that renames another noun right beside it. The
appositive can be a short or long combination of words. Look at these examples:
The insect, a cockroach, is crawling across the kitchen table.
The insect, a large cockroach, is crawling across the kitchen table.
The insect, a large cockroach with hairy legs, is crawling across the
kitchen table.
The insect, a large, hairy-legged cockroach that has spied my bowl of
oatmeal, is crawling across the kitchen table.
Here are more examples:
During the dinner conversation, Clifford, the messiest eater at the table, spewed mashed potatoes like an
erupting volcano.
Genette's bedroom desk, the biggest disaster area in the house, is a collection of overdue library books,
dirty plates, computer components, old mail, cat hair, and empty potato chip bags.
Reliable, Diane's eleven-year-old beagle, chews holes in the living room carpeting as if he were still a
puppy.
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Punctuate the appositive correctly.
The important point to remember is that a nonessential appositive is
always separated from the rest of the sentence with comma(s).
 When the appositive begins the sentence, it looks like this:
A hot-tempered tennis player, Robbie charged the umpire and tried to
crack the poor man's skull with a racket.
 When the appositive interrupts the sentence, it looks like this:
Robbie, a hot-tempered tennis player, charged the umpire and tried to
crack the poor man's skull with a racket.
 And when the appositive ends the sentence, it looks like this:
Upset by the bad call, the crowd cheered Robbie, a hot-tempered tennis
player who charged the umpire and tried to crack the poor man's skull
with a racket.
Got the blues?
Some suggested formats:
 Make a list of crazy (and sane) things you could do
to distract yourself from your troubles.
 Write about what makes you happy.
 Write a recipe for a happy day.
 Draw a funny cartoon that makes you laugh.
Warm Up #25— Dec 9/12
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justin was reflecting back on his
career in music entertainment and
then justin thanks every one who
he had been associated with
Corrected
Reflecting on his
entertainment career, Justin
thanked everyone with
whom he had been
associated.
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Who or Whom?
Whoever? Whomever?
One trick: [Isolate the phrase that includes the
who/whom]
Ask yourself if the phrase (JUST the phrase) would sound
better with the subjective form (he, she, we, they, I) or
the objective case (him, her, us, them, me)?
We will be kind to [_ whoever____ knocks on our door.] she
knocks; he knocks; we knock
 Another: If the sentence itself sounds good without
any pronoun, it is generally WHOM
Tom is the student ( whom ) the teachers picked as
outstanding.
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Test Yourself. Who or whom?
Whomever? Whoever?
A prank was pulled on a student {____ I
know quite well}.
 When the going gets tough,{ _______
are you going to call}?*
 To _______ am I speaking? (switch to sent)
 {________ we elect for president} will be in
office for the next four years.
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*Ghost-busters!!
Warm Up# 26 Dec 12/13
the guidence counseler made a
suggestion that seniors who
are graduating should submit
early applications to the
colleges of there choices
(21 wds)
What is a Nominalization?
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Nominalization – a noun derived from a verb or
adjective, such as determination from determine
In general, try to avoid these and choose the stronger
verb form to be concise
Made a suggestion= suggested
Should submit early applications= apply early
Active, strong verbs and adjectives
Analysis
Suggestion
Conclusion
Carelessness
Difficulty
Analyze
Suggest
Conclude
Careless
Difficult
Try it…
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It was the intention of the steering committee to
interview all candidates face to face.
The steering committee intended to interview all
candidates personally.
Corrected
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The guidance counselor
suggested that graduating
seniors should apply early to the
colleges of their choice.*
*…their top colleges. (14)
*. . . their chosen colleges.
(16 wds) *. . .their preferred colleges.
Warm Up Sentence #27 Dec 15/16
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the corruption of the church
during the middle ages is
illustrated by chaucer in the
pardoners tale who uses
allegorical references
Corrected
Chaucer uses allegorical
references to illustrate the
corruption of the church
during the Middle Ages in the
“Pardoner’s Tale.”
(also a good thesis sentence!)
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Warm Up # 28—Dec 19/20
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wandering around in a daze,
and blabbering incoherantly the
paramedic made the decision
that the motorcycle accident
victim is in shock
Revised
The paramedic decided the
motorcycle accident victim,
wandering around in a daze
and blabbering incoherently,
was in shock.
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Misplaced (or dangling) Modifiers
A.K.A. Dangling/misplaced participial phrases -ing
 After following the vision program for two weeks,
my doctor told me that my eyesight had improved.
THINK:
Who’s? following the vision program?
Are you or is the Doc?
Make sure your modifying participial phrase is close to
its antecedent
Participle (the –ing word modifying the
noun---acts as a modifier---thus, D.M.
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Building blocks:
A participle is an '-ing' word that modifies a noun.
Very often, words that end in '-ing' are the present
participles of verbs, such as swimming, talking,
laughing, and so on.
A participle can be part of a larger phrase, called
a participial phrase, that modifies a noun.
Quick rules:
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The participial phrase should be followed
by a comma and then by the noun that's
being modified.
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singing a tune, I often close my eyes
That noun must be the subject of the main clause.
When the participial phrase does not modify the
subject, we say that it is dangling.
When singing a tune, the music is sweetly flowing.
Let's break down Ted's sentence.
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After getting kicked off the basketball team, the mall became Jake's
new favorite hangout.
As the sentence is written now, the subject of the main clause seems
to be 'the mall.' Ted's teacher asked if malls could dribble and shoot
(heh heh) because this sentence implies that the mall got kicked off
the basketball team.
Correction: Sentences with dangling participles usually require some
reworking. Here are two alternatives:
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After getting kicked off the basketball team, Jake started hanging out
at the mall.
The mall became Jake's new favorite hangout after he got kicked off
the basketball team.
http://www.methodist.edu/english/dd_index.htm
Warm Up #29 Dec 21/Jan 3
each year americans chop
down more then 30,000,000
christmas trees, most of them
are just throwed away after
the hollidays
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Revised
Every year Americans chop
down more than 30 million
Christmas trees; most of them
are just thrown away after the
holidays.
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Warm Up #29 Happy New Year!
January 3, 2012
each year americans chop
down more then 30,000,000
christmas trees, most of them
are just throwed away after the
hollidays
Revised
Every year Americans chop
down more than 30 million
Christmas trees; most of them
are just thrown away after the
holidays.
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Numbers in Writing
Don’t begin a sentence with a numeral
30 trees were planted in the forest.
 Individual numerals under 10---WRITE OUT
I planted 3 trees.
 Numbers written out under two syllables ok---over, use
the numeral
The Sierra Club planted thirty five thousand trees.
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Trivia: Roman Numerals-- To what does MC refer ?
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Roman Numerals I = 1 C = 100 V = 5 D = 500 X = 10 M = 1000 L = 50
Block 1: Review
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Define: nefarious
Which word means sneaky or unnoticeable?:
 Discrete
 Define:
 Which
or Discreet
Mellifluous
word from list seven means to wait in line, or as
a noun, means the “line” itself?
More Review
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Give an example of a nominalization for: analyze.
How about for determine?
How would you punctuate a movie? Mission Impossible
Where does the period go when you are using
quotations for someone talking? “talking”, or “talking.”
What do we call conversation in a text?
What is the difference between a memoir and a
narrative?
How many headings are there in an I-Search paper?
Block 4 Mini Review
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Archetype vs. stereotype?
Abhor? Amenable? Cajole? Belie? Atrophy?
Charlatan? Impervious? Garrulous? Forbearance?
Extricate? Insolence? Indolence? Euphemism?
Ephemeral?
Comitatus? Wergeild?
Memoir vs. Autobiography?
Annotation?
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Comma splice vs. fused?
Dangling/misplaced participial phrase?
Appositives?
Annotation?
Capitalization/Punctuation of titles
Comparative/Superlative?
Warm Up #30—Happy New Year!
January 4, 2012
After visiting Agra the site
of the taj mahal with the
Morris’s, the photos were
fun to look at.
Corrected
After visiting Agra, the site
of the Taj Mahal, with the
Morrises, we had fun
looking at the photos.
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Correcting for appositive, misplaced participial phrase, and preposition
placement
Revised
On their trip to India, the
Morrises stopped at Agra,
the site of the Taj Mahal.
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Possessives
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1. Most English nouns form their possessives with an apostrophe s (’s) if they are singular, and an s
apostrophe (s’) if they are plural.
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2. For nouns that form their plural in ways other than the addition of an s, form the possessive plural by
adding ’s. For example:
Woman’s/women’s, man’s/men’s, child’s/children’s, ox’s/oxen’s, deer’s/deer’s, mouse’s/mice’s
3. You have a couple of options in forming the possessive of singular nouns that end in s. You can either:
Add an apostrophe to the end of the word:
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Singular possessive: The car’s hood.
Plural possessive: The cars’ hoods.
Remember, just because a possessive adds an s to a word, it does not make that word plural. On the other hand,
both singular and plural nouns can be made possessive.
Jesus’ miracles
Keats’ odes
Dickens’ novels
…or add an apostrophe s to the end of the word:
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Jesus’s miracles
Keats’s odes
Dickens’s novels
Choose the form that seems easier to pronounce or more natural. Nouns that end in s and have their possessives
formed by an apostrophe s can be difficult to pronounce; think of Homer’s struggles with his neighbor’s last name:
Flandereses’.
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4. The possessive of pairs:
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John and Mary’s mother (John and Mary have the same mother.)
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a. To show joint possession, add ’s only to the second member of the pair:
b. To show individual possession, add ’s to each member of the pair:
John’s and Mary’s tennis rackets (John and Mary each have their own tennis rackets.)
5. Form the possessive of group and compound nouns by adding ’s to the end of the unit:
commander in chief’s, someone else’s, son-in-law’s
6. We usually reserve the ’s or s’ for the possessive of nouns naming living creatures (human beings and animals). For
inanimate objects we usually show possession with the of phrase:
The roof of the house instead of The house’s roof
Some common exceptions to this rule:
A day’s wages, a week’s work, the year’s (storm’s, weekend’s) death toll, the school’s policies, the government’s
meddling, the car’s performance, the ship’s crew
Possessives without an apostrophe
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The following pronouns show possession without the use of an apostrophe:
His
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Hers
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yesterday when i saw my friend from boise
idaho i should of returned the tape she borrowed
me
Corrected: Yesterday, when I saw my friend
from Boise, Idaho, I should have returned the
tape she lent me.
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bobby and sven was making swedish cookies
and he had to buy more butter at freds foods
Corrected: Bobby and Sven were making
Swedish cookies, and Bobby (or Sven) had to buy
more butter at Fred's Foods.
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bobby and sven was making swedish cookies
and he had to buy more butter at freds foods
Corrected: Bobby and Sven were making
Swedish cookies, and Bobby (or Sven) had to buy
more butter at Fred's Foods.
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yesterday when i saw my friend from boise
idaho i should of returned the tape she borrowed
me
Corrected: Yesterday, when I saw my friend
from Boise, Idaho, I should have returned the
tape she lent me.
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yes before grandmother arrives we finish
painting the west bedroom
Corrected: Yes, before Grandmother arrives,
we will finish painting the west bedroom.
Subj/verb agreement