Transcript Fragments: Freedom from Forbidden

Fragments:
Forbidden and Freed
GRAMMAR AND USAGE
9-12
Warm Up
Please write your name, big and clear, on the
unlined side of the index card at your seat.
2. On the lined side, please write three nouns
(remember to use concrete, proper, specific), three
vivid verbs, and three awesome adjectives that
capture who you are, what you like, what makes
you very unique. You can write more.
3. Afterwards, on your Warm Up Sheet, write 2-3
complete sentences explaining the choices you
made on your lists.
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Lesson: Fragments
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Please listen and read along as I read a fragment of
Walt Whitman’s “Song of Myself” out loud.
Impressions? Observations?
Re-read and re-listen paying attention to the nouns,
verbs, and adjectives that describe him.
So obviously this fragment of the poem is made up of
parts of Walt Whitman. What error did he purposefully
make?
Why would he do this?
What is a negative effect?
What is a positive effect?
“Song Of Myself” by Walt Whitman
The smoke of my own breath,
Echoes, ripples, buzz'd whispers, love-root, silk-thread, crotch and vine,
My respiration and inspiration, the beating of my heart, the passing of
blood and
air through my lungs,
The sniff of green leaves and dry leaves, and of the shore and darkcolor'd sea-rocks, and of hay in the barn,
The sound of the belch'd words of my voice loos'd to the eddies of the wind,
A few light kisses, a few embraces, a reaching around of arms,
The play of the shine and shade on the trees as the supple boughs wag,
The delight alone or in the rush of the streets, or along the fields and hillsides,
The feeling of health, the full-moon trill, the song of me rising from bed and
meeting the sun.
Writer’s Notebook
A. Table of Content Section is Editing
B. Fragments is the term
C. Define—What is it? What is it missing?
D. Breaking the Rules: When is it okay? How often?
Practice One
A. Writer’s Notebook Writing Pages Section
B. Title Fragments of Me
C. Read the following fragments exercise after you
read the directions. Complete as many as you can
in the alloted time.
Edit
Add a subject (noun phrase), verb, predicate (verb phrase),
or a complete thought to help this writer. After each, in
parenthesis, indicate what you added. As always, use
your voice !
1. Worn out from study
2. Because the room was so dark
3. In order to save money
4. A popular writer
5. After I exercised in the weight room
6. To have faith in yourself
7. Editing the final draft of a paper
Practice Two
What is your song?
Your purpose for writing is to show who are.
Your audience is your peers, your teacher, and your Keeper.
Use the nouns, verbs, adjectives and anything else you can to create phrases and write
your Fragments of Me text. Feel free to change the title. Remember, concrete,
proper, and specific nouns, vivid verbs, and awesome adjectives are excellent
writing tools. Use poetry, prose, or whatever floats your boat.
Play with space and if you will perform, write in physical directions, musical ideas,
visual aids.
Write the whole time, please. Feel free to play with lists, thinking maps, drawings,
movements, dialogue, journal writing, etc. at first to get you going or after to see
what else you can create. If you are done early, which I hope you’re not, look at the
What Should I Do Now? Chart and simply respect other’s space and time.
Fragments of Me
Nouns: an English teacher, Minneapolis, Minnesotan,
Virgo
Verbs: talker, listener, lover**
Adjectives: social**, silly, sweet
Fragments of Us
Splotches of color, curtains waiting to let the sun shine
in,
Love long, lazy days…barreling down a train track,
loyal to others as my shell is to me, walking with two
feet and peddling with two wheels,
Wrap Up
What is a fragment and what is it missing?
2. What effect do fragments have in our writing.
What is one positive effect? What is one negative?
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Homework: Get feedback from one Keeper. Revise this
or another portfolio piece.
Thanks for another good day! See ya!