Transcript 06_Elaboration

Language Network
Elaboration
Elaboration
Elaboration
Elaboration provides details that
help the reader fully understand
the topic.
Elaboration
Types of Elaboration
Sensory Details
Facts and Statistics
Sensory Details
Sensory details are bits of information
that you collect through
your five senses.
sight
sound
touch
taste
smell
Sensory Details
When you elaborate
with sensory details,
you give the reader a
much clearer idea of
what you are
describing.
Sensory Details
You can use a word web to help you add
sensory details to your writing.
Looks like the
stuffing in pillows
Smells like sweet,
clean air
My
First Snowfall
Feels like an icecream sundae
Sounds like loud
crunching
Tastes like cold
cotton candy
Sensory Details
STUDENT MODEL
SENSORY DETAILS
I saw snow for the first time when I was
ten... When I looked out the window early
one morning, it seemed like someone
was shaking the stuffing out of pillows
and letting it drift downward. I put on my
new boots and ran outside. I was surprised
by the noise of my boots crunching on the
hard surface of the packed snow…The air
smelled clean and sweet. I grabbed a
handful of snow. It felt like I was putting
my hand into an ice-cream sundae!...
SIGHT
SOUND
SMELL
TOUCH
Sensory Details
To gather details about a person or
object, make careful observations.
Keep a small notebook or journal
with you and jot them down.
If you are writing about
something that has happened,
close your eyes and try to
visualize the event.
Facts and Statistics
Facts are statements that
can be proved.
Facts and Statistics
Statistics are facts expressed with one or
more numbers.
Statistics can be used to make
comparisons between things or
between a part of something
and the whole.
Facts and Statistics
When you elaborate with
facts and statistics, you
help your readers
understand your ideas.
Facts and Statistics
FACTS AND STATISTICS
LITERARY MODEL
The final size and richness of this new ship was
astounding. She was 882 feet long, almost the length
of four city blocks. With nine decks, she was as high as
an eleven-story building…
As her name boasted, the Titanic was indeed the
biggest ship in the world.
--Robert D. Ballard, Exploring the Titanic
Facts and Statistics
Give your reader comparisons, not
just numbers.
Elaboration
Elaborating with Visuals
Diagrams
Other Visuals
Practice and Apply
Elaboration
Using visuals to elaborate is a great
way to show rather than tell.
Your reader can
see at a glance
what information
you are giving and
how it all fits
together.
Diagrams
Diagrams
Diagrams are drawings that give
information about an object or
a process.
Diagrams
Types of diagrams include
• time lines • flow charts
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• labeled drawings
Diagrams
You can elaborate with a diagram.
A volcano is an opening in the crust of the earth
where lava, ashes, and gases are released.
Inside a Volcano
Ash cloud
full of bits of rock and
magma (hot, liquid
rock)
Magma chamber
volcanic eruption
happens when magma
travels upward and
breaks through the
earth’s crust
Cone
layers of hardened,
cooled lava and other
materials ejected from
the volcano
Central vent
and side vent
magma flows from
the chamber
through here
Other Visuals
Charts and graphs present facts and
statistics in a visual format.
They let your
reader see and
compare
information easily.
Other Visuals
STUDENT MODEL
CHARTS AND GRAPHS
Volcanoes have caused some of the worst natural
disasters in history. Lava flows have destroyed
whole towns, and people have starved to death
because their farmland got covered with ashes and
nothing could grow. Over the past 200 years, more
than 250,000 people have died because of
volcano eruptions. Four huge eruptions caused
about 70 percent of those deaths.
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Other Visuals
How does this graph elaborate on volcanoes?
STUDENT MODEL
CHARTS AND GRAPHS
Deadliest Volcano Eruptions, Late 1700s-Present
Practice and Apply
Add sensory details to the
following sentence.
1. Barbara photographed a cactus in the
desert.
Practice and Apply
Add sensory details to the
following sentence.
2. The big bear looked menacing.
Practice and Apply
Add sensory details to the
following sentence.
3. I remember my first trip to a movie
theater.
Practice and Apply
Provide facts or statistics to support the
following statement.
To see statistics you can use, click here.
4. Cultures around the world are
rapidly becoming part of a global,
fast-paced community.
Practice and Apply
• In one California school 32 different languages are spoken
by the student body.
• More than one-fifth of the world population speaks English.
• Television took 13 years to acquire 50 million users; within
five years, the Internet had 50 million users.
• Russia, China, and India now have some of the same fastfood restaurant chains that the U.S. has.
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